Subjunctive Check:
It would be easier to sort the boxes if there was a master list
or
It would be easier to sort the boxes if there were a master list
I cannot get either to sound completely right or wrong, even though I'm leaning toward the first.
Wash: Were I unwed, I would take you in a manly fashion. Kaylee: 'Cause I'm pretty? Wash: 'Cause you're pretty.
'Heart Of Gold'
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DebetEsse - Dec 16, 2007 4:36:30 am PST #9592 of 10001
Woe to the fucking wicked.
Laura - Dec 16, 2007 5:48:38 am PST #9593 of 10001
Our wings are not tired.
I believe was is correct, but were sounds better to my ear. t not helpful
Ginger - Dec 16, 2007 5:51:12 am PST #9594 of 10001
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
The first is right. A master list is possible; it's neither contrary to fact nor a wish, so it's not subjunctive. If sentences start worrying me like that, I usually consider rewording, e.g., "A master list would make it easier to sort the boxes."
DebetEsse - Dec 16, 2007 2:07:55 pm PST #9595 of 10001
Woe to the fucking wicked.
Thanks, guys.
Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:40:09 pm PST #9596 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
I shall rise
I shall rise
Clean the night from my eyes
Scatter nightmares to the skies
I shall rise
I shall rise
Firm resolution to be wise
No more faltering into lies
I shall
rise
I shall
rise
Reject that which
Nullifies
I shall. . .
I shall. . .
Rise.
Seek that which purifies
(o silence amplifies
my guise)
I shall rise I shall rise!
Break
these ties
I will. . .
I. . .
Will. . .
will dies
Liese S. - Dec 16, 2007 6:41:15 pm PST #9597 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Wow.
Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:45:30 pm PST #9598 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
thanks. Any tips, crits, etc. I wrote it last night, so it's rough
Laura - Dec 16, 2007 6:46:18 pm PST #9599 of 10001
Our wings are not tired.
Oh, did I choose a good time to subscribe.
Very nice, Erin. Wow.
Amy - Dec 16, 2007 6:48:58 pm PST #9600 of 10001
Because books.
Erin! Dude, that's awesome!
These are my favorite lines:
Clean the night from my eyes
Scatter nightmares to the skies
Go, Erin, with the inspired poetry!
Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:49:05 pm PST #9601 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
thanks. It's one thing insomnia is good for.