The first is right. A master list is possible; it's neither contrary to fact nor a wish, so it's not subjunctive. If sentences start worrying me like that, I usually consider rewording, e.g., "A master list would make it easier to sort the boxes."
Well, we may not have parted on the best of terms. I realize certain words were exchanged. Also, certain... bullets. But that's air through the engine. It's past. We're business people.
Mal ,'Serenity'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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Ginger - Dec 16, 2007 5:51:12 am PST #9594 of 10001
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
DebetEsse - Dec 16, 2007 2:07:55 pm PST #9595 of 10001
Woe to the fucking wicked.
Thanks, guys.
Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:40:09 pm PST #9596 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
I shall rise
I shall rise
Clean the night from my eyes
Scatter nightmares to the skies
I shall rise
I shall rise
Firm resolution to be wise
No more faltering into lies
I shall
rise
I shall
rise
Reject that which
Nullifies
I shall. . .
I shall. . .
Rise.
Seek that which purifies
(o silence amplifies
my guise)
I shall rise I shall rise!
Break
these ties
I will. . .
I. . .
Will. . .
will dies
Liese S. - Dec 16, 2007 6:41:15 pm PST #9597 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Wow.
Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:45:30 pm PST #9598 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
thanks. Any tips, crits, etc. I wrote it last night, so it's rough
Laura - Dec 16, 2007 6:46:18 pm PST #9599 of 10001
Our wings are not tired.
Oh, did I choose a good time to subscribe.
Very nice, Erin. Wow.
Amy - Dec 16, 2007 6:48:58 pm PST #9600 of 10001
Because books.
Erin! Dude, that's awesome!
These are my favorite lines:
Clean the night from my eyes
Scatter nightmares to the skies
Go, Erin, with the inspired poetry!
Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:49:05 pm PST #9601 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
thanks. It's one thing insomnia is good for.
Laura - Dec 16, 2007 6:52:00 pm PST #9602 of 10001
Our wings are not tired.
Any tips, crits, etc.
So, to consider this request I read a couple more times. (didn't suffer)
and the only thing I would suggest is where you have
I shall rise I shall rise!
Break
these ties
I would say maybe
I shall rise I shall rise!
Break break
these ties
(so new here I hesitate massively to interject thoughts)
erikaj - Dec 16, 2007 7:57:28 pm PST #9603 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Feeling very weird about some praise I just got for writing that I'm totally confused, lonely, and my life sucks.(I used prettier words than that, but still. I was on a deadline and therefore exploited my personal issues and now someone thinks I'm emotionally complicated instead of too lazy to make shit up) It feels both terrible and FG.