thanks. It's one thing insomnia is good for.
That's not what making out sounds like -- unless I'm doing it wrong?
Willow ,'Same Time, Same Place'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:49:05 pm PST #9601 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
Laura - Dec 16, 2007 6:52:00 pm PST #9602 of 10001
Our wings are not tired.
Any tips, crits, etc.
So, to consider this request I read a couple more times. (didn't suffer)
and the only thing I would suggest is where you have
I shall rise I shall rise!
Break
these ties
I would say maybe
I shall rise I shall rise!
Break break
these ties
(so new here I hesitate massively to interject thoughts)
erikaj - Dec 16, 2007 7:57:28 pm PST #9603 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Feeling very weird about some praise I just got for writing that I'm totally confused, lonely, and my life sucks.(I used prettier words than that, but still. I was on a deadline and therefore exploited my personal issues and now someone thinks I'm emotionally complicated instead of too lazy to make shit up) It feels both terrible and FG.
Susan W. - Dec 16, 2007 8:04:59 pm PST #9604 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
That's a wonderful piece, Erin!
Karl - Dec 16, 2007 8:13:29 pm PST #9605 of 10001
I adore all you motherfuckers so much -- PMM.
Agreed that praise for the quality of your expression of lack of fulfillment is a bit odd.
But then there were 20th-century novelists (Roth comes to mind, but there are numerous others) who made a career of it. So ... depends on which way you look at it, I s'pose.
Laura - Dec 17, 2007 1:41:43 am PST #9606 of 10001
Our wings are not tired.
They are your personal issues to exploit! Next time exploit someone's else issues and see if the praise feels different. Seriously, enjoy the praise without reservation. Yay!
Beverly - Dec 17, 2007 6:38:54 am PST #9607 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Erin, that's gorgeous!
Man, my insomnia never pays off that well. I gotta talk to my insomnia dealer...
Fantastic work, woman. Good onya.
erikaj - Dec 17, 2007 8:15:41 am PST #9608 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Well, whenever I *intend* to "blow the lid off" something, it sinks like a rock. But I wasn't trying, to, say, paint a portrait of somebody who doesn't know where she's going so it feels uncomfortable taking the compliment for something I banged out in twenty minutes.
Ginger - Dec 17, 2007 8:19:39 am PST #9609 of 10001
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
Everyone feels lack of fulfillment. It's a universal theme that can resonate with anyone.
I don't think anything really gets banged out in 20 minutes. It was about stuff you've thought about a lot and the thinking is more important than the typing.
Scrappy - Dec 17, 2007 8:20:24 am PST #9610 of 10001
Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it.
What Ginger said. Take the praised as earned, Erika.