I believe was is correct, but were sounds better to my ear. t not helpful
It's called a blaster, Will, a word that tends to discourage experimentation. Now, if it were called the Orgasmater, I'd be the first to try your basic button press approach.
Xander ,'Get It Done'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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Laura - Dec 16, 2007 5:48:38 am PST #9593 of 10001
Our wings are not tired.
Ginger - Dec 16, 2007 5:51:12 am PST #9594 of 10001
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
The first is right. A master list is possible; it's neither contrary to fact nor a wish, so it's not subjunctive. If sentences start worrying me like that, I usually consider rewording, e.g., "A master list would make it easier to sort the boxes."
DebetEsse - Dec 16, 2007 2:07:55 pm PST #9595 of 10001
Woe to the fucking wicked.
Thanks, guys.
Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:40:09 pm PST #9596 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
I shall rise
I shall rise
Clean the night from my eyes
Scatter nightmares to the skies
I shall rise
I shall rise
Firm resolution to be wise
No more faltering into lies
I shall
rise
I shall
rise
Reject that which
Nullifies
I shall. . .
I shall. . .
Rise.
Seek that which purifies
(o silence amplifies
my guise)
I shall rise I shall rise!
Break
these ties
I will. . .
I. . .
Will. . .
will dies
Liese S. - Dec 16, 2007 6:41:15 pm PST #9597 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Wow.
Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:45:30 pm PST #9598 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
thanks. Any tips, crits, etc. I wrote it last night, so it's rough
Laura - Dec 16, 2007 6:46:18 pm PST #9599 of 10001
Our wings are not tired.
Oh, did I choose a good time to subscribe.
Very nice, Erin. Wow.
Amy - Dec 16, 2007 6:48:58 pm PST #9600 of 10001
Because books.
Erin! Dude, that's awesome!
These are my favorite lines:
Clean the night from my eyes
Scatter nightmares to the skies
Go, Erin, with the inspired poetry!
Strix - Dec 16, 2007 6:49:05 pm PST #9601 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
thanks. It's one thing insomnia is good for.
Laura - Dec 16, 2007 6:52:00 pm PST #9602 of 10001
Our wings are not tired.
Any tips, crits, etc.
So, to consider this request I read a couple more times. (didn't suffer)
and the only thing I would suggest is where you have
I shall rise I shall rise!
Break
these ties
I would say maybe
I shall rise I shall rise!
Break break
these ties
(so new here I hesitate massively to interject thoughts)