My most recen tproblem is that I'll have a terrific idea, it gives me chills, it delights me, but as soon as it starts appearing on screen/paper, it goes blah.

I read stuff I've written, and it sings. Hell, I once caught myself reading an old Spike/Xander, AND I FORGOT I WROTE IT! And it was good! Where the hell did she go, that writer?

Comments posted.

MWAH! This was great! Just what I needed to know, where to flesh it out a bit more, what was good so I can keep doing that.

Perfect.

Bless.

Insent, Allyson. And if you want to add me on LJ, I'm Fashionista_35.

Great! You're so dead on about the narration, and making that crisper so that the POV is far more clear.

A good cheat, if you want to try it, is to take a section and change the pronouns to "I" for the character whose POV you want to highlight. In other words, sort of a poor man's first person POV-- it's a quick way to delineate where you want the POV shifts.

Good. I'm fairly new to betaing, so I'm never sure if I'm giving the right kind of feedback. But I'm really excited about this book.

And I almost bought a bathouse today, and I was thinking of you! Normally, I'd be thinking of Jilli, because it had a supercute bat insignia on it.

I'm ste_noni

Anybody about for a beta? Longish chapter one-- reworked, of my skating romance. Agent Kate wanted more tension and I'm hoping I accomplished it.

How long are you willing to wait for input, Barb? I'm at work, where I can't really devote my attention to it, but I'd love to take a look at it.