Early: So is it still her room when it's empty? Does the room, the thing, have purpose? Or do we -- what's the word? Simon: I really can't help you. Early: The plan is to take your sister. Get the reward, which is substantial. 'Imbue.' That's the word.

'Objects In Space'


The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Laga - Aug 14, 2008 12:07:01 pm PDT #645 of 6687
You should know I'm a big deal in the Resistance.

MM (not that I've ever finished anything I've started but) what works for me is to skip ahead to a place I had already thought about and write about that until the blanks are ready to be filled in.


Allyson - Aug 14, 2008 12:13:31 pm PDT #646 of 6687
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica

Sure. What's your LJ again?


Connie Neil - Aug 14, 2008 12:15:56 pm PDT #647 of 6687
brillig

My most recen tproblem is that I'll have a terrific idea, it gives me chills, it delights me, but as soon as it starts appearing on screen/paper, it goes blah.

I read stuff I've written, and it sings. Hell, I once caught myself reading an old Spike/Xander, AND I FORGOT I WROTE IT! And it was good! Where the hell did she go, that writer?


Liese S. - Aug 14, 2008 12:20:05 pm PDT #648 of 6687
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."

Comments posted.


Allyson - Aug 14, 2008 12:25:04 pm PDT #649 of 6687
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica

MWAH! This was great! Just what I needed to know, where to flesh it out a bit more, what was good so I can keep doing that.

Perfect.

Bless.


Barb - Aug 14, 2008 12:29:32 pm PDT #650 of 6687
“Not dead yet!”

Insent, Allyson. And if you want to add me on LJ, I'm Fashionista_35.


Allyson - Aug 14, 2008 12:33:46 pm PDT #651 of 6687
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica

Great! You're so dead on about the narration, and making that crisper so that the POV is far more clear.


Barb - Aug 14, 2008 12:37:52 pm PDT #652 of 6687
“Not dead yet!”

A good cheat, if you want to try it, is to take a section and change the pronouns to "I" for the character whose POV you want to highlight. In other words, sort of a poor man's first person POV-- it's a quick way to delineate where you want the POV shifts.


Liese S. - Aug 14, 2008 12:59:20 pm PDT #653 of 6687
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."

Good. I'm fairly new to betaing, so I'm never sure if I'm giving the right kind of feedback. But I'm really excited about this book.

And I almost bought a bathouse today, and I was thinking of you! Normally, I'd be thinking of Jilli, because it had a supercute bat insignia on it.


Stephanie - Aug 14, 2008 2:26:48 pm PDT #654 of 6687
Trust my rage

I'm ste_noni