Awwwww, Karl. You're a sweetie.
Raq, I love yours.
This is my boat. They're part of my crew. No one's getting left. Best you get used to that.
Mal ,'Ariel'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
juliana - Apr 20, 2006 6:23:44 am PDT #6219 of 10001
I’d be lying if I didn’t say that I miss them all tonight…
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 7:42:07 am PDT #6220 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
You sense that Fortune 500 CEOs sniff each others' butts too, to find out who's alpha.
And they're taught how to do it at Skull & Bones....
Beverly - Apr 20, 2006 9:00:29 am PDT #6221 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Whew, didn't mean to stink up the place.
Here, I'll open the windows, it'll air out.
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 12:41:00 pm PDT #6222 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Did something "oh, MAN!" this morning. It is possible that the Kinkaids will be acquiring a BNF in the form of Dave Letterman's band leader. Fourway email - to said Bandleader, to the head of PR for the Rock Hall Foundation (they actually do the induction ceremony every year), to the head of PR for the Rock Hall Museum (Cleveland ROCKS, yo!) and to my own reps, went out a brief while ago.
Meep.
Meep meep.
Hoping the bandleader - who is also the house bandleader for the Hall, and has been, since the day it opened - can at least see his way to provide me with the tech info I need to write that upcoming section of Cleveland Rocks properly. But he's also been asked if he'd like to read and maybe blurb.
And that would rock, roll and shimmy, because, well, visible much?
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 12:41:32 pm PDT #6223 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
edit: Bev, I loved that - I've just been nosedown in scary PR stuff and phone calls.
-t - Apr 20, 2006 1:09:14 pm PDT #6224 of 10001
I am a woman of various inclinations and only some of the time are they to burn everything down in frustration
Good luck, deb, that sounds great.
Bev, I really dug the lion thing. I just keep forgetting to comment because I am a bad giver of feedback.
Beverly - Apr 20, 2006 1:11:30 pm PDT #6225 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Woo! Deb. All crossables crossed.
Well, everybody did evaporate. I thought it was me. Memememe!
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 2:00:36 pm PDT #6226 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Well, everybody did evaporate. I thought it was me. Memememe!
Speaking just for me? Memememe?
The evaporation by memememe was purely memememe.
Typo Boy - Apr 20, 2006 3:28:32 pm PDT #6227 of 10001
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 3:38:02 pm PDT #6228 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Gar, yep - but you might want to look at the "I said" "she said" deal.
Because you only have two characters - this is verbal duel, two people only. So the explanation - I said, she said - becomes superfluous. Your reader is right there in the dialogue - punctuating with the narrator telling us something that's already been shown actually slows it down.
If you want to really bring the scary? Punctuate with character reaction, not narrator action. A la:
"Then what are doing with it?” Her tone was completely friendly.
“Ben said you wanted me to have it.” Tendrils of cold crept up my arm. “From the – incidents - lately, it seems he was misinformed.”
You may find it easier to involve the reader in the picture you're painting, that way.