Good luck, deb, that sounds great.
Bev, I really dug the lion thing. I just keep forgetting to comment because I am a bad giver of feedback.
Kaylee: H-how did you... g-get on...? Early: Strains the mind a bit, don't it? You think you're all alone. Maybe I come down the chimney, Kaylee. Bring presents to the good girls and boys.
'Objects In Space'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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-t - Apr 20, 2006 1:09:14 pm PDT #6224 of 10001
I am a woman of various inclinations and only some of the time are they to burn everything down in frustration
Beverly - Apr 20, 2006 1:11:30 pm PDT #6225 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Woo! Deb. All crossables crossed.
Well, everybody did evaporate. I thought it was me. Memememe!
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 2:00:36 pm PDT #6226 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Well, everybody did evaporate. I thought it was me. Memememe!
Speaking just for me? Memememe?
The evaporation by memememe was purely memememe.
Typo Boy - Apr 20, 2006 3:28:32 pm PDT #6227 of 10001
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 3:38:02 pm PDT #6228 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Gar, yep - but you might want to look at the "I said" "she said" deal.
Because you only have two characters - this is verbal duel, two people only. So the explanation - I said, she said - becomes superfluous. Your reader is right there in the dialogue - punctuating with the narrator telling us something that's already been shown actually slows it down.
If you want to really bring the scary? Punctuate with character reaction, not narrator action. A la:
"Then what are doing with it?” Her tone was completely friendly.
“Ben said you wanted me to have it.” Tendrils of cold crept up my arm. “From the – incidents - lately, it seems he was misinformed.”
You may find it easier to involve the reader in the picture you're painting, that way.
Gus - Apr 20, 2006 4:39:27 pm PDT #6229 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.
Please find enclosed one scanned image of a cheque for actual real dollars from an actual publisher.
Wait. B.org doesn't do images. Buffistas have imaginations that are perfectly able to picture dollar-signs, decimal points, and digits.
Especially digits this seldom.
Never mind that. I have here a cheque from a reliable source, rendered to me for monkeying around with a keyboard. Life is good.
Scrappy - Apr 20, 2006 4:44:37 pm PDT #6230 of 10001
Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it.
Congrats, Gus!
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 4:55:15 pm PDT #6231 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Gus, isn't it fun?
Gus - Apr 20, 2006 4:57:06 pm PDT #6232 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.
Thanks, Robin. I attribute the bux to lurking around GWW, soaking up all the good advice silently, then running to the bank.
Lee - Apr 20, 2006 4:59:32 pm PDT #6233 of 10001
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.
Congratulations, Gus!