edit: Bev, I loved that - I've just been nosedown in scary PR stuff and phone calls.
Y'all see the man hanging out of the spaceship with the really big gun? Now I'm not saying you weren't easy to find. It was kinda out of our way, and he didn't want to come in the first place. Man's lookin' to kill some folk. So really it's his will y'all should worry about thwarting.
Mal ,'Safe'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 12:41:32 pm PDT #6223 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
-t - Apr 20, 2006 1:09:14 pm PDT #6224 of 10001
I am a woman of various inclinations and only some of the time are they to burn everything down in frustration
Good luck, deb, that sounds great.
Bev, I really dug the lion thing. I just keep forgetting to comment because I am a bad giver of feedback.
Beverly - Apr 20, 2006 1:11:30 pm PDT #6225 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Woo! Deb. All crossables crossed.
Well, everybody did evaporate. I thought it was me. Memememe!
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 2:00:36 pm PDT #6226 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Well, everybody did evaporate. I thought it was me. Memememe!
Speaking just for me? Memememe?
The evaporation by memememe was purely memememe.
Typo Boy - Apr 20, 2006 3:28:32 pm PDT #6227 of 10001
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 3:38:02 pm PDT #6228 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Gar, yep - but you might want to look at the "I said" "she said" deal.
Because you only have two characters - this is verbal duel, two people only. So the explanation - I said, she said - becomes superfluous. Your reader is right there in the dialogue - punctuating with the narrator telling us something that's already been shown actually slows it down.
If you want to really bring the scary? Punctuate with character reaction, not narrator action. A la:
"Then what are doing with it?” Her tone was completely friendly.
“Ben said you wanted me to have it.” Tendrils of cold crept up my arm. “From the – incidents - lately, it seems he was misinformed.”
You may find it easier to involve the reader in the picture you're painting, that way.
Gus - Apr 20, 2006 4:39:27 pm PDT #6229 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.
Please find enclosed one scanned image of a cheque for actual real dollars from an actual publisher.
Wait. B.org doesn't do images. Buffistas have imaginations that are perfectly able to picture dollar-signs, decimal points, and digits.
Especially digits this seldom.
Never mind that. I have here a cheque from a reliable source, rendered to me for monkeying around with a keyboard. Life is good.
Scrappy - Apr 20, 2006 4:44:37 pm PDT #6230 of 10001
Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it.
Congrats, Gus!
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 4:55:15 pm PDT #6231 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Gus, isn't it fun?
Gus - Apr 20, 2006 4:57:06 pm PDT #6232 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.
Thanks, Robin. I attribute the bux to lurking around GWW, soaking up all the good advice silently, then running to the bank.