Well, everybody did evaporate. I thought it was me. Memememe!
Speaking just for me? Memememe?
The evaporation by memememe was purely memememe.
Gunn: You saying popping mama threw you a beating? Lorne: Kid Vicious did the heavy lifting. Cordy just mwah-ha-ha'd at us.
'Underneath'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 2:00:36 pm PDT #6226 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Typo Boy - Apr 20, 2006 3:28:32 pm PDT #6227 of 10001
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 3:38:02 pm PDT #6228 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Gar, yep - but you might want to look at the "I said" "she said" deal.
Because you only have two characters - this is verbal duel, two people only. So the explanation - I said, she said - becomes superfluous. Your reader is right there in the dialogue - punctuating with the narrator telling us something that's already been shown actually slows it down.
If you want to really bring the scary? Punctuate with character reaction, not narrator action. A la:
"Then what are doing with it?” Her tone was completely friendly.
“Ben said you wanted me to have it.” Tendrils of cold crept up my arm. “From the – incidents - lately, it seems he was misinformed.”
You may find it easier to involve the reader in the picture you're painting, that way.
Gus - Apr 20, 2006 4:39:27 pm PDT #6229 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.
Please find enclosed one scanned image of a cheque for actual real dollars from an actual publisher.
Wait. B.org doesn't do images. Buffistas have imaginations that are perfectly able to picture dollar-signs, decimal points, and digits.
Especially digits this seldom.
Never mind that. I have here a cheque from a reliable source, rendered to me for monkeying around with a keyboard. Life is good.
Scrappy - Apr 20, 2006 4:44:37 pm PDT #6230 of 10001
Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it.
Congrats, Gus!
deborah grabien - Apr 20, 2006 4:55:15 pm PDT #6231 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Gus, isn't it fun?
Gus - Apr 20, 2006 4:57:06 pm PDT #6232 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.
Thanks, Robin. I attribute the bux to lurking around GWW, soaking up all the good advice silently, then running to the bank.
Lee - Apr 20, 2006 4:59:32 pm PDT #6233 of 10001
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.
Congratulations, Gus!
Gus - Apr 20, 2006 5:14:09 pm PDT #6234 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.
DG, Perkins, I'm frackin' giddy!
These dollars are so much better than any other dollars.
Steph L. - Apr 20, 2006 5:24:12 pm PDT #6235 of 10001
I look more rad than Lutheranism
Gus, get down with your bad writer self! Way to go!
ION, I drabbled. It's longer than 100 words, and I don't even know if I like it, but here it is:
I'm told that I should want to be a part of your shining golden ranks. So I do, and I cry when you ignore me...but not for long.
I'm told I should be filled with wide-eyed admiration at the Greek letters on your shirt, and that I should offer my body up to you in sheer gratitude that you would choose me. So I do...and I end up watching the clock over your shoulder and wondering when I can go back to my dorm room, my unoccupied bed, and my books.
I'm told to pare down my very flesh in order to lure the pick of the stud farm and make sure he stays by my side. So I try, but I am, it seems, too much to be contained in a tiny frame.
I will never be, never have, never achieve what it is that I'm told I should want, no matter how hard I try. Because, you see, what I want isn't in there. It's out here.