These are all wonderful and amazing. What a topic! I continually marvel at the level of artistry and talent in this bunch. I learn so much from being a part of this community.
And, damn, ita. Just damn. Tears to the eye.
I love the smell of desperate librarian in the morning.
Snyder ,'Showtime'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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Liese S. - Apr 13, 2006 4:40:46 pm PDT #6096 of 10001
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Topic!Cindy - Apr 13, 2006 5:20:58 pm PDT #6097 of 10001
What is even happening?
ita, that's gorgeous.
Is this a typo:
Would you know me when I came?
I don't get it--what's wrong with it?
I wasn't sure of that line, either. Is he trying to ask...
1) If the person/people would have known him (back then)
or
2) If the person/people would know him, if he were to come now
If it's the first, I think "Would you have known me when I came?" works.
If it's the second, I think "Would you know me were I to come?" might work.
If it's something else, never mind.
§ ita § - Apr 13, 2006 5:27:57 pm PDT #6098 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.
It's more like "Once I have come (my coming is now past tense) would you know me?"
There's you now, then in the future I come, and then at some point past that, would you know me?
Weird, but that turn of phrase says all that to me.
Not proper English?
Amy - Apr 13, 2006 5:52:21 pm PDT #6099 of 10001
Because books.
I do grammar by ear mostly (says the woman who often copyedits and actually gets paid for it -- little do they know). I got it first time around, but that could just be me.
Is drabblicious missing a letter, ita? Or did I make your head 'splodey for another reason?
§ ita § - Apr 13, 2006 5:59:19 pm PDT #6100 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.
Or did I make your head 'splodey for another reason?
Oh, not you. The topic.
I have at least one more. I think.
SailAweigh - Apr 13, 2006 6:03:09 pm PDT #6101 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Go, ita. Go, ita. Write it down, bring it round. Go, ita.
Allyson - Apr 13, 2006 6:04:44 pm PDT #6102 of 10001
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Plei and Cindy, I don't know if I made it through your spam filters, but I sent the thing.
Amy - Apr 13, 2006 6:24:56 pm PDT #6103 of 10001
Because books.
I have at least one more. I think.
You're on fire today, lady. Very cool.
Me for bed.
§ ita § - Apr 13, 2006 6:31:24 pm PDT #6104 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.
I took liberties with the PoV character not matching the suggestion, because I didn't want it to sound like it was about me.
****
You know you don't know, and it bothers you. Leukemia perhaps, but how does one ask about that? She's always pleasant, so pleasant you don't realize you've shared more than she has by the time you part.
If you can't talk to her about cancer, how can you bring up a man with more temper than self-control? Maybe talk about clumsiness, a coltish physicality in a woman's body. Or martial arts, joke about the other guys, and how badly off they must be.
But just in case, you don't. And you never let her see you stare at her bruises.
P.M. Marc - Apr 13, 2006 7:01:48 pm PDT #6105 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear
Allyson, got it. Read right before my bus ride, mused, went and had Chinese food with my parents, mused some more, and will back fling shortly.