It's more like "Once I have come (my coming is now past tense) would you know me?"

There's you now, then in the future I come, and then at some point past that, would you know me?

Weird, but that turn of phrase says all that to me.

Not proper English?

I do grammar by ear mostly (says the woman who often copyedits and actually gets paid for it -- little do they know). I got it first time around, but that could just be me.

Is drabblicious missing a letter, ita? Or did I make your head 'splodey for another reason?

Or did I make your head 'splodey for another reason?

Oh, not you. The topic.

I have at least one more. I think.

Go, ita. Go, ita. Write it down, bring it round. Go, ita.

Plei and Cindy, I don't know if I made it through your spam filters, but I sent the thing.

I have at least one more. I think.

You're on fire today, lady. Very cool.

Me for bed.

I took liberties with the PoV character not matching the suggestion, because I didn't want it to sound like it was about me.

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You know you don't know, and it bothers you. Leukemia perhaps, but how does one ask about that? She's always pleasant, so pleasant you don't realize you've shared more than she has by the time you part.

If you can't talk to her about cancer, how can you bring up a man with more temper than self-control? Maybe talk about clumsiness, a coltish physicality in a woman's body. Or martial arts, joke about the other guys, and how badly off they must be.

But just in case, you don't. And you never let her see you stare at her bruises.

Allyson, got it. Read right before my bus ride, mused, went and had Chinese food with my parents, mused some more, and will back fling shortly.

Thank you, Plei. Your feedback, and deb's feedback, helped me come to the conclusion that I'm writing to how I think it could be received, instead of just writing what I want to say.

If that makes sense. I didn't realize that was what was sticking. Does that happen to any of you?

Yeah, that makes sense.

And yes, back when I was still writing show analysis, I'd find myself stuck on that, because fandom is extra-flamey.