I need to know if the story flows or clunks along, what resonates, what falls on its face, what seems trite/dumbed down (which is my biggest ish with writing for kids, it seems I'm afraid I'm talking down to them).
Zoe: Jayne. This is something the Captain has to do for himself. Mal: No! No, it's not!
'War Stories'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Allyson - Aug 14, 2008 11:50:47 am PDT #640 of 6681
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Barb - Aug 14, 2008 11:51:54 am PDT #641 of 6681
“Not dead yet!”
Send away if you want-- Fashionista35@comcast.net
Liese S. - Aug 14, 2008 11:55:26 am PDT #642 of 6681
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
I'm here, too, Allyson. Is this what you've posted on lj? 'Cause I'm about to comment over there. Sorry I've been such a flake about betaing for you. It's a marvelous story.
Allyson - Aug 14, 2008 11:57:15 am PDT #643 of 6681
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
oooh! Comment! Comment!
I've been horribly nervous.
Stephanie - Aug 14, 2008 12:04:48 pm PDT #644 of 6681
Trust my rage
oh, you are posting on LJ? Can I be on the filter?
Laga - Aug 14, 2008 12:07:01 pm PDT #645 of 6681
You should know I'm a big deal in the Resistance.
MM (not that I've ever finished anything I've started but) what works for me is to skip ahead to a place I had already thought about and write about that until the blanks are ready to be filled in.
Allyson - Aug 14, 2008 12:13:31 pm PDT #646 of 6681
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Sure. What's your LJ again?
Connie Neil - Aug 14, 2008 12:15:56 pm PDT #647 of 6681
brillig
My most recen tproblem is that I'll have a terrific idea, it gives me chills, it delights me, but as soon as it starts appearing on screen/paper, it goes blah.
I read stuff I've written, and it sings. Hell, I once caught myself reading an old Spike/Xander, AND I FORGOT I WROTE IT! And it was good! Where the hell did she go, that writer?
Liese S. - Aug 14, 2008 12:20:05 pm PDT #648 of 6681
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Comments posted.
Allyson - Aug 14, 2008 12:25:04 pm PDT #649 of 6681
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
MWAH! This was great! Just what I needed to know, where to flesh it out a bit more, what was good so I can keep doing that.
Perfect.
Bless.