He has an evil, seperated from his body...hand.?!Unlike my left one, that does impressions thereof. So yes, I pretty much type one handed...hope I don't go blind, too.
Damn, nearly forgot: erika, the Evil Hand's not separate from his body. Angel cut it off and the Evil Doctors at WOlfram and Hart replaced with a Satanic Hand, that has a mind of its own.
deb, lovely, fun drabble. I think I know gave erika the impression you were writing about a detached hand. This section:
He rolls it, flexes it, kneels carefully. The guitar case has three snap-latches; the first two are fine, the third the hand skitters across the top. Fucking tease.
The "the first two are fine, the third the hand" is a little confusing. I think I missed reading the "the" prior to "hand" there on my first read, and so had to read it twice to get what you meant. I figured it out, because I have a guitar, and its case has 3 latches. At first, I did read it as if you meant 3 hands. Drabbles are so tight word-wise, I'm not sure what to suggest to clarify.
cereal--because I'm an idiot and submitted too soon...
sj, that's your first? That's a good story. Oh, if our show had only made so much sense. I love the despair premise. I like the details of the tea, the continuity shout-out, and Giles cleaning his glasses. Very good. More, please.
The "the first two are fine, the third the hand" is a little confusing. I think I missed reading the "the" prior to "hand" there on my first read, and so had to read it twice to get what you meant. I figured it out, because I have a guitar, and its case has 3 latches. At first, I did read it as if you meant 3 hands. Drabbles are so tight word-wise, I'm not sure what to suggest to clarify.
I thought that too. Maybe a comma after "third", deb.
It's a nice drabble.
Thankee.
Fixed, to read:
He rolls it, flexes it, kneels carefully. The guitar case has three snap-latches; the first two are fine, third latch, the hand skitters across the top. Fucking tease.
I wanted to keep the staccato rhythm of it, since despite the third person, the hand is really being viewed through a filter of Lindsey's exasperation with it.
Ok, then...Lindsey's hand works like...my whole body. Because, essentially the wiring is only indifferently connected. My brain sends messages that only parts of me can pick up. Which freaks out the muscles(don't you love my mastery of all these technical concepts?)
Sj, most excellent rendition of the Buffy & Giles relationship. Good voices, too.
erika, it's also pretty similar to what the MS does, in terms of signals.
I grok the Evil Hand, but mine's my left one.
Good voices, too.
Thank you. I need to hear this because I had myself convinced that I couldn't write dialogue.
Deb, I love the evil hand story. I also understand the body not doing what you want/expect it to do.
I just wrote straight-up smut. Ditto. I put it on Friends lock in lj(belated return to modesty and probity.) I'm all sweaty now...I must be doing something right. I've got...authority issues, I think. Damn.And I'm very dirty, somewhere in there. Proud and afraid, I am. Also afraid that what I wrote doesn't reflect the filthy image in my head. That damn physical body thing again. It's Ripper/Kay.
I'm not on lj. Will you e-mail it to me?
You know what? Fuck it. I can trust y'all, right? Promise you'll only laugh at the jokes? And Hec, keep it out of my dossier, mmkay? Unless it does it for you...that would be a point of some pride.
OK, going public...."I'm here! I'm a perv. Something something." Give me a minute. Sj, the link gods are not cooperating, insent shortly.
Rather more(cleans glasses) passion than technique is involved, I'm afraid. Suggestions welcomed.
