My whole life, I've never loved anything else.

Oz ,'Him'


Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies  

Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.

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Lee - Jan 17, 2005 3:28:45 pm PST #9992 of 10001
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.

Is it going to be all in one place any time soon?


victor infante - Jan 17, 2005 3:34:59 pm PST #9993 of 10001
To understand what happened at the diner, we shall use Mr. Papaya! This is upsetting because he's the friendliest of fruits.

Is it going to be all in one place any time soon?

Need to give it an edit, and then turn it over to Plei, who's going to put it up on her site.


Lee - Jan 17, 2005 3:51:43 pm PST #9994 of 10001
The feeling you get when your brain finally lets your heart get in its pants.

Cool. If you need someone to do a beta/proofread, I'd be honored. Actually, I'd be sneaky and greedy, since then I'd get to read the whole thing sooner, but really, what's the difference, right?


victor infante - Jan 17, 2005 3:53:16 pm PST #9995 of 10001
To understand what happened at the diner, we shall use Mr. Papaya! This is upsetting because he's the friendliest of fruits.

Cool. If you need someone to do a beta/proofread, I'd be honored. Actually, I'd be sneaky and greedy, since then I'd get to read the whole thing sooner, but really, what's the difference, right?

I'll probably be fine--I've been editing after each post, and have even gone back to the beginning a couple times, so it should be out pretty quick.


Karl - Jan 17, 2005 5:18:14 pm PST #9996 of 10001
Love one another.

Lots of nit-picking:

“You can’t be here, Illyria,” said the First, it’s voice now venomous.

No apostrophe in the possessive 'its.'

“No,” said Wesley. “Well be finished before that.”

Conservation of Apostrophes: You need one in 'We'll.'

“Uhm, did I miss something” said Spike.

Need a question mark here, and should probably be 'Spike asked' rather than 'said Spike.'

... pulled from it a gem composed of black fire, and the First transformed into a horned, bat-winged beast, and then disappeared all together.

Run-on sentence. Full stop after 'fire,' delete the 'and,' new sentence beginning 'The First transformed ...'

“It’s OK Wes,” said Angel.

Comma between 'OK' and 'Wes.'

“Where what’s going, said Buffy,

Missing close-quote.

“So’s Lilah,” said Justine. She disappeared when the monsters did. And I haven’t seen Ethan or Marcie—well, I’ve never seen Marcie—for ages.

Missing quotes around the second half of the direct speech.

Instead, she smiled, and disappeared.

No comma after 'smiled.'

Riley knew by the whisper in his hear that it was over.

You want 'ear' rather than 'hear' here.

“But what about Angel” said Connor, exacerbated.

Question mark inside the quotes. You want 'exasperated' instead of 'exacerbated.'

“We’ll give you all the help we can. The Council. Won’t we Giles.”

Comma after 'Won't we,' and question mark rather than full stop.

Riley spoke quietly for a moment to Riley, and then Riley and his wife left, too.

Not sure what's meant here, but Riley talking to himself probably isn't it.

There was a bind between them now, Oz knew

You probably want 'bond' here.

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Nice work, Victor. I'm looking forward to seeing it all in one place.


victor infante - Jan 17, 2005 5:41:49 pm PST #9997 of 10001
To understand what happened at the diner, we shall use Mr. Papaya! This is upsetting because he's the friendliest of fruits.

Thanks, Karl!

BTW--There are actually 45 parts to this. I found I'd messed up the numbering along the way. Argh.


sumi - Jan 18, 2005 8:54:56 am PST #9998 of 10001
Art Crawl!!!

Well, 45 is 43ish.


erikaj - Jan 18, 2005 9:03:04 am PST #9999 of 10001
This machine kills fascists

All my fics have, well 43a or something, so you won't hear about that from me.Wow, this is emotional...the thread where I learned to fic, closing. I'm all verklempt.


Connie Neil - Jan 18, 2005 9:08:42 am PST #10000 of 10001
brillig

We need a new fic thread, folks.


DXMachina - Jan 18, 2005 9:19:42 am PST #10001 of 10001
You always do this. We get tipsy, and you take advantage of my love of the scientific method.

And now you have one...

"Buffista Fic 2: They Said It Couldn't Be Done." Jan 18, 2005 11:17:43 am PST


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