Zoe: Uh huh. River, honey? He's putting the hair away now. River: It'll still be there... waiting.

'Jaynestown'


Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies  

Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.


Nicole - Sep 25, 2003 12:22:43 pm PDT #6834 of 10001
I'm getting the pig!

I do think - don't hit me - that you haven't got Angel's voice down quite right; I couldn't wrap his tongue around a few of his lines.

No no no! That's exactly what I want to know. And deborah, you were one of the people that I really wanted feedback from so of course I wouldn't hit you. I decided before posting it that if certain people didn't make a comment on the story - because they either couldn't stand it or had nothing nice to say - that I would discontinue the writing thing. A least until I took classes or looked at a dictionary again.

Huge thanks to everyone that did read it and comment on it. I take no offense at criticism. Even smonster with her Affect obsession. *g*


Connie Neil - Sep 25, 2003 12:26:11 pm PDT #6835 of 10001
brillig

I was worried that it had too much dialogue

t blink blink that's possible?


erikaj - Sep 25, 2003 12:27:53 pm PDT #6836 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Wrod...was just wondering the same.


Nicole - Sep 25, 2003 12:47:35 pm PDT #6837 of 10001
I'm getting the pig!

Wrod...was just wondering the same.
Well, since I haven't read much buffyfic (or others) I wasn't sure how much back story or description about what the characters looked like I should include, therefore making the dialogue stand out to me.

In regards to Angel's dialogue, I had to re-watch parts of Season One Angel to try to get a feel for him (back when he used to smile and laugh more often even when a baby wasn't in the scene) and it didn't work. For some reason I can't hear what I think he would say in my head.

Any suggestions? (Like that's an easy question.)


erikaj - Sep 25, 2003 12:49:08 pm PDT #6838 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Hmmm, I don't have a good handle on him, either. Watch a lot of episodes. Does he remind you of anyone? Go with it if he does.


Nicole - Sep 25, 2003 12:56:23 pm PDT #6839 of 10001
I'm getting the pig!

I think the other characters sound pretty strong - especially since I didn't give Anya much to say. It must just be a thing with Exceptionally Old and Been on the Earth Longer Than Anyone I've Ever Met characters.


erikaj - Sep 25, 2003 12:59:04 pm PDT #6840 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Uh huh...that is a problem. My Spike voice is only good for a sentence and a half at a time. Very sad.


Connie Neil - Sep 25, 2003 1:00:59 pm PDT #6841 of 10001
brillig

My Spike voice is only good for a sentence and a half at a time

Then you make him do something else with his mouth.


erikaj - Sep 25, 2003 1:01:54 pm PDT #6842 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!

Yeah, there is that...


Nicole - Sep 25, 2003 1:08:25 pm PDT #6843 of 10001
I'm getting the pig!

But...but...

I can't do that with Angel because he only has Cordelia in that scene with him and Cordy+Angel=Ewwwww! for me.

Hmmm, plagiarizing isn't the end of the world...

Now where is my 'Angel, The Casefiles' book.....