That's twisted, askye. Very Wes and Faith.

Thanks! I think I'm going to let it rest and then expand it so everyone's motivations aren't so rushed.

Alison, love this:

Think it’s a fair trade? Buffy gets to be normal and the other gets to be special. Isn’t that what everyone wants?”

but this?

sent the sheathed knife between her ribs

I think you need to get the sheath off it first.

Very twisted indeed.

connie, loving your Xander. Couple of tee-niney nitpicks.

Tara was laying [lying] down with her head in Willow's lap.

Xander was in the seat (right) behind Anya and hanging over her seat back, watching everything. Spike had taken the spot (right) behind Joyce and Dawn for now

I'd suggest choosing one "right," especially since Buffy says "right?" in the next sentence.

Right.

Hey, it was nearly 2 AM when I finally agreed that it had gone far enough to stop and I should get to bed.

Lurvely. I said tee-niney. Wee things not really worthy of mention, given the overall glow of yumminess given off by the whole piece.

Truly, the characters are each right, and right there. As usual with your stuff, connie, I "see" the characters as I read, and hear the lines in their voices.

connie, that's wonderful stuff.

Beverly, thanks, I pretty much wrote that part around midnight and was trying to indicate he was using a hidden wrist knife thing. That's one reason I want to rewrite the story.

Askye, that's very nicely twisted. I like it. I didn't think it felt especially rushed. The first sentence isn't a sentence:

When Faith showed up unexpectedly at Wesley’s door, looking strangely vulnerable, her attitude and swagger worn thin.

I think something's missing in there. Otherwise, it's sick and hot.

Truly, the characters are each right, and right there. As usual with your stuff, connie, I "see" the characters as I read, and hear the lines in their voices.

Beverly is me.

Deena it really isn't a sentence because Wes washing his hands was originally the opening paragraph only in present tense and set off so that all the action between Faith and Wes was a flashback until it got to Wes combing the tangles out of Faith's hair, that was flipped back to present time.

So it was, Wes going out, Faith's body, then flipping to Faith at the door, only with pronouns. I realized the mistake when I was reading over it as I was about to hit post in LJ so I had to make a quick fix.

Despite the flaws everyone thinks the story is twisted and dark and hot, which is what I was going for so I'm very very happy about that.