'Sleeper'
Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.
Askye, that's very nicely twisted. I like it. I didn't think it felt especially rushed. The first sentence isn't a sentence:
When Faith showed up unexpectedly at Wesley’s door, looking strangely vulnerable, her attitude and swagger worn thin.
I think something's missing in there. Otherwise, it's sick and hot.
Truly, the characters are each right, and right there. As usual with your stuff, connie, I "see" the characters as I read, and hear the lines in their voices.
Beverly is me.
Deena it really isn't a sentence because Wes washing his hands was originally the opening paragraph only in present tense and set off so that all the action between Faith and Wes was a flashback until it got to Wes combing the tangles out of Faith's hair, that was flipped back to present time.
So it was, Wes going out, Faith's body, then flipping to Faith at the door, only with pronouns. I realized the mistake when I was reading over it as I was about to hit post in LJ so I had to make a quick fix.
Despite the flaws everyone thinks the story is twisted and dark and hot, which is what I was going for so I'm very very happy about that.
Oh, definitely twisted, dark and hot, and few flaws, imo. I like it.
Hellyeah, twisted, and dark, and very hot, with a kick in the teeth ending. And as Deena says, the flaws are few.
I was going to say, before I got booted -
Ali, it turned out nicely, I think.
connie, loving it.
The first segment of Career Change V: Glory Night is up at my website
The real fun begins ...
At this point connie is just being mean!
Elena, you sound surprised. t blink, blink, evil grin
Remember, missy, I've been in your brain - I'm sharing a jug of something-or-other with Otis right now! AFGI... I'm a little drunk.