she spoke again with bated breath
Hilariously bad as it all is, I do have to give her props for using "bated" rather than "baited."
Wild monkey love or tender Sarah McLachlan love?
Xander ,'Him'
Fan Fiction: Writers, Readers, and Enablers
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Susan W. - Mar 21, 2005 10:10:24 am PST #9696 of 10000
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Dana - Mar 21, 2005 10:11:03 am PST #9697 of 10000
"I'm useless alone." // "We're all useless alone. It's a good thing you're not alone."
Yeah, figures she gets that right, but three times in the rest of the chapter, she referrs to "deja-vous."
Noumenon - Mar 21, 2005 10:13:01 am PST #9698 of 10000
No other candidate is asking the hard questions, like "Did geophysicists assassinate Jim Henson?" or "Why is there hydrogen in America's water supply?" --defective yeti
Nikita deftly lowered the man’s trousers and as he placed his hands on her head, she blew his mind with calculated moves. Using her mouth, her lips so soft and wet, with vacuity she gave him thorough head.
She has vacuity?
She was blowing his mind?
erikaj - Mar 21, 2005 10:13:50 am PST #9699 of 10000
Always Anti-fascist!
She's got a problem...ok, with the golf carts? A few. But it's like she can't tell the word she wants from one that's close. (I think all writers do this, sometimes) but "facility" is not "vacuity" by a long sight. Better to use short words you actually know.
Betsy HP - Mar 21, 2005 10:15:30 am PST #9700 of 10000
If I only had a brain...
She has vacuity?
She was blowing his mind?
Good point. Vacuums don't blow, unless you hook the hose up backwards.
shrift - Mar 21, 2005 10:17:20 am PST #9701 of 10000
"You can't put a price on the joy of not giving a shit." -Zenkitty
Terrible Nikita writer does crossovers!
But is there a clay dildo in this story, is what I want to know.
Signed,
Still Traumatized From Saturday's BadFicFest, Thanks
P.M. Marc - Mar 21, 2005 10:18:07 am PST #9702 of 10000
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear
But is there a clay dildo in this story, is what I want to know.
Great. The streams crossed, and I just went to a BAD Clayface place.
Dana - Mar 21, 2005 10:18:09 am PST #9703 of 10000
"I'm useless alone." // "We're all useless alone. It's a good thing you're not alone."
But is there a clay dildo in this story, is what I want to know.
I'm afraid sex toys made of unusual materials might be a special feature of Stargate. And possibly Sentinel.
erikaj - Mar 21, 2005 10:21:42 am PST #9704 of 10000
Always Anti-fascist!
Gonna have to look at that(show?, movie?) although the first time N. talks to M. I know I'm gonna crack up. You know she thinks that stuff sounds sexy, too. And it might if she wasn't tone deaf.
Jars - Mar 21, 2005 10:22:22 am PST #9705 of 10000
But is there a clay dildo in this story
Heh. You need to see my office. We collect stones that look like cocks. Yes, we keep them in Cock Rock Corner. Yes, archaeologists have the maturity of twelve year-old boys.
I think I like the chattels best.