Book: Afraid I might be needing a preacher. Mal: That's good. You lie there and be ironical.

'Safe'


The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...  

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


-t - Dec 05, 2007 1:13:36 pm PST #9568 of 10001
I am a woman of various inclinations and only some of the time are they to burn everything down in frustration

Eeeeee, Jilli that's so great! I'm so happy!


Connie Neil - Dec 05, 2007 1:56:01 pm PST #9569 of 10001
brillig

Is this the big news you've been hinting at for months?


Amy - Dec 05, 2007 2:00:51 pm PST #9570 of 10001
Because books.

So much yay, Jill! Gothic Charm School for the win!


SailAweigh - Dec 05, 2007 3:02:54 pm PST #9571 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb

Go, Jilli! I can't wait to see your stuff in print! Are you going to have Pete design the dust cover?


sarameg - Dec 05, 2007 3:34:39 pm PST #9572 of 10001

Yay!


sumi - Dec 05, 2007 7:27:20 pm PST #9573 of 10001
Art Crawl!!!

Congratulations, jilli!!


Anne W. - Dec 06, 2007 1:53:05 am PST #9574 of 10001
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.

Congratulations, Jilli!


Susan W. - Dec 06, 2007 8:10:13 am PST #9575 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights

Question for the writing hivemind:

The manuscript I'm working is meant to be first in a series, so one of the new-to-me issues I'm dealing with is striking the right balance between making each volume reasonably self-contained and still having an overarching plot and theme for the series as a whole.

The first volume is all about a little group of people coming together and deciding to fight back after a severe military setback. In the second volume, the group gets a little larger and better organized, but it's the same basic idea--they're scrappy resistance fighters trying to harass a much larger enemy force until help gets there. And they're confident that help is on the way, because there's a whole large army out there that's on their side. It's just that the army in question is at such a distance (and in a relatively low-tech world with no mechanized transport or immediate communication) that it may be a year or so before they get there.

Anyway, the army tries to come to the rescue, only to be utterly annihilated in an ambush--very few survivors, most of them imprisoned under harsh conditions or sold into slavery, etc. One officer escapes and sets out on an odyssey to get back to Our Heroes and let them know what happened.

So, I have two dilemmas: When should the reader find out about the massacre of the army, and when should the characters find out?

My initial thought for the first question was to have it be the prologue of Book Two. But now I'm wondering if it'd be better as the epilogue of Book One, since I'm only a third of the way into the story and already my characters are reassuring each other that all they have to do is hang on till the cavalry (and infantry and artillery) arrive. So I'm afraid my readers will think I've set up an easy solution, and therefore I need to let them know that there is no cavalry sooner rather than later. OTOH, kind of a downer to directly follow up Our Heroes' unlikely triumph in the battle at the end of Book One with the Gory Depressing Massacre Scene of Hopelessness. Thoughts?

On the question of when my characters find out they're on their own, I know it's going to be toward the end of Book Two. I just can't decide if it's before or after that book's Climactic Unlikely Battlefield Triumph. Before would give me a really bleak black moment before Our Heroes decide to keep fighting anyway, but after would have some dramatic potential, too, because Our Heroes could then end the book wondering if they're fighting for a hopeless cause and so on. Thoughts on that one?


Miracleman - Dec 06, 2007 10:20:15 am PST #9576 of 10001
No, I don't think I will - me, quoting Captain Steve Rogers, to all of 2020

Hm. My tendency would be to start Book Two with a scene of Big Ol' Army of Save the Day-ness walking through Ambush Land and then there's a shot, a shout, some shit...but we don't know they's all corpsified yet. Leave the reader hanging.

Then, later on, Officer of Gloomy Messageosity can show up and be all "Hey, yeah, you know that big ol' Army of Save the Day-ness? Funny story..."


Susan W. - Dec 06, 2007 10:51:13 am PST #9577 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights

Ooh, I like, though it would cut into my plans to occasionally switch to Major Gloom's POV as he makes his way over mountain, desert, and ocean to bring his message of doom.

I also need to decide if it's too much of a coincidence for Major Gloom to be the cousin of one of my other main characters. It's tidy, and gives them family when the rest of their relatives are A) dead or B) traitors. OTOH, why would the one person who makes it back from the ginormous army just happen to be related to one of Our Heroes.