Nah. I have some of the insecurity Jilli. A sustainability expert contracted to a publishing house is checking my book for validity RIGHT NOW. And I sent this out confident that I got every detail right. Guess how much of that confidence is left right now while I'm waiting for the verdict.
And what's the fun in becoming an immortal demon if you're not regular, am I right?
The Mayor ,'End of Days'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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Typo Boy - Jul 06, 2006 11:14:57 am PDT #7729 of 10001
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
Topic!Cindy - Jul 06, 2006 11:16:03 am PDT #7730 of 10001
What is even happening?
This little freak out goes to negative 11?
Atropa - Jul 06, 2006 11:16:46 am PDT #7731 of 10001
The artist formerly associated with cupcakes.
Guess how much of that confidence is left right now while I'm waiting for the verdict.
Oh fine, then. You can have the insecurity about fact-checking. The insecurities about, oh, being able to put together a coherent and entertaining sentence? All with me right now.
Atropa - Jul 06, 2006 11:19:13 am PDT #7732 of 10001
The artist formerly associated with cupcakes.
A quick beta/advice on a sentence, please?
Goths don’t all think they’re vampires, they’re not all depressed and suicidal, and if Goths are in a cult, than so is every single fan of an organized sport.
I think that does what I want it to, but I can't really tell at the moment.
Topic!Cindy - Jul 06, 2006 11:20:31 am PDT #7733 of 10001
What is even happening?
Piffle. Your insecurities are false, as I just understood everything you posted, Jilli, even though it makes no sense whatsoever.
That'll put marzipan in your pie plate, bingo.
Dana - Jul 06, 2006 11:21:39 am PDT #7734 of 10001
I'm terrifically busy with my ennui.
Your "than" should be "then."
If you're worried about clarity, you could change the serial commas to semicolons. Might help.
Topic!Cindy - Jul 06, 2006 11:23:09 am PDT #7735 of 10001
What is even happening?
Goths don’t all think they’re vampires, they’re not all depressed and suicidal, and if Goths are in a cult, than so is every single fan of an organized sport.
You mean "then" instead of "than". I might either end the first sentence after vampires, or put a semi-colon in place of the comma after vampires, but punctuation is not my gift. As a statement/explanation, I like it just fine.
xposty goodness.
Atropa - Jul 06, 2006 11:39:06 am PDT #7736 of 10001
The artist formerly associated with cupcakes.
Splendid. Thank you!
deborah grabien - Jul 06, 2006 11:47:37 am PDT #7737 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Yep. And in point of fact, I'd suggest changing that last bit to lose then "then" entirely. Something like:
Goths don’t all think they’re vampires, they’re not all depressed and suicidal, and if Goths are in a cult? So is every single fan of an organized sport.
ION, I just got off the three-way conference with Daymond and Kate. And I believe it's safe, at this point, to say
Let. the. games. muthafuckin'. BEGIN!
Atropa - Jul 06, 2006 11:49:37 am PDT #7738 of 10001
The artist formerly associated with cupcakes.
Deb, that's wonderful news!