I'm good with the dog, but it's the difference between Benji and Cujo.
And like I said, sometimes cute is okay, especially for kids.
Hell, I don't know. If I had wanted schooling, I'da gone to school.
Jayne ,'Ariel'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Amy - Jul 19, 2013 12:49:44 pm PDT #5742 of 6687
Because books.
Ginger - Jul 19, 2013 1:09:52 pm PDT #5743 of 6687
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
Think of the dog in Harlan Ellison's "A Boy and His Dog."
EpicTangent - Jul 19, 2013 4:18:24 pm PDT #5744 of 6687
Why isn't everyone pelting me with JOY, dammit? - Zenkitty
The only problem I had with the Mischievous Dog was where he was listed. The list of companions was like, Build, Build, Build...Fizzle. I thought maybe that was purposeful, and going for funny, but I'm not sure it quite worked. But listing the dog first, then building to a Brawling Princess? I'm in.
Gudanov - Jul 23, 2013 12:01:27 pm PDT #5745 of 6687
Coding and Sleeping
Noted. As I'm plotting it, the dog probably will be clever rather than mischievous, mischievous just won't fit the plot as I have it coming together. Now, I just need to plot it so the dog doesn't die at the end. I'm not a fan of dead dog stories. The major points I had, but I've got to tie them all together and fill in the details.
My daughter has also informed me that Trine is the name of a video game, so I'll have to change that. I still need a name from the Brawling Princess too. The others I've got: Cloud, Smoke, Moon, and Varden.
Toddson - Jul 23, 2013 12:52:14 pm PDT #5746 of 6687
Friends don't let friends read "Atlas Shrugged"
Give the princess a fluttery, girly name ... to play off her penchant for tavern brawls?
As many parents discover, you don't always get what you expect.
Connie Neil - Jul 23, 2013 12:57:18 pm PDT #5747 of 6687
brillig
"Her Royal Highness, Princess Lavender Pearl, slugged back another mouthful of raw tavern ale as she smacked the next thug in the back of the head of the remnants of her chair."
Connie Neil - Jul 23, 2013 12:57:49 pm PDT #5748 of 6687
brillig
- with the remnants of her chair.
Toddson - Jul 23, 2013 12:59:39 pm PDT #5749 of 6687
Friends don't let friends read "Atlas Shrugged"
Princess Eugenia Alexandrina?
Typo Boy - Jul 23, 2013 1:43:57 pm PDT #5750 of 6687
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
Also, in terms of saving the dog: lots of really evil people are sentimental about animals. Kind of ironic if, after killing many people, your villain chooses to spare the dog.
Could even be a good bit of dialog.
"After all the people you tortured and murdered, you spare a dog?"
"I *like* dogs."
Gudanov - Jul 24, 2013 5:04:45 am PDT #5751 of 6687
Coding and Sleeping
Well, the villain isn't really evil, he has good intentions, but he's determined to be blind to the consequences of his actions. Sort of like someone who wants to produce energy and create jobs, but refuses to believe in climate change because it's, well, inconvenient.
There has to be a sacrifice at the end of the story, but it's just a matter of who and what. I'm hoping to avoid dog and death.