Fred: So you don't worry that it's possible for someone to send out a biological or electronic trigger that effectively overrides your own sense of ideals and values and replaces them with an alternative coercive agenda that reduces you to a mindless meat puppet? Shopkeeper: Wow. People used to think that I was paranoid.

'Time Bomb'


The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


-t - Jan 24, 2011 12:27:22 pm PST #3936 of 6690
I am a woman of various inclinations and only some of the time are they to burn everything down in frustration

Cooling our Fevered Planet: Policy Solutions Beyond Carbon Pricing


Typo Boy - Jan 24, 2011 12:34:02 pm PST #3937 of 6690
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.

Cooling our Fevered Planet: Unconventional Solutions to the Climate Crisis


Liese S. - Jan 24, 2011 12:35:14 pm PST #3938 of 6690
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."

Ooh, I like -t's.


Typo Boy - Jan 24, 2011 1:06:24 pm PST #3939 of 6690
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.

or, losing fevered planet again:

Solving the Climate Crisis: Policy beyond Carbon Pricing and Conventional Wisdom

I like -t's too, but now am thinking of Connie's point that too much focus on carbon pricing might exclude people not aware of it. So above?

Or On Edit: "Solving the Climate Crisis: Policy Beyond Conformity and Carbon Pricing"


Deena - Jan 24, 2011 5:07:57 pm PST #3940 of 6690
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara

Cooling our Fevered Planet: Unconventional Solutions to the Climate Crisis

This one's my favorite.


dcp - Jan 24, 2011 5:10:39 pm PST #3941 of 6690
The more I learn, the more I realize how little I know.

Deena, did SA reach you? She posted Natter saying she was trying to get in touch.


Deena - Jan 24, 2011 6:07:59 pm PST #3942 of 6690
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara

I saw that just now, and I found the email from this morning. I was out most of the day getting new glasses (I can see!). Unfortunately, I don't know if she's around her email to get it.

Edit: And for all those following along at home, all is well.


Gudanov - Jan 26, 2011 5:07:18 am PST #3943 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping

Cooling our Fevered Planet: Unconventional Solutions to the Climate Crisis

I like that one too!


Gudanov - Jan 26, 2011 5:09:58 am PST #3944 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping

I'm working on my query letter template and this is what I've got currently for the part about the book:

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Humanity exists on the brink, hiding in isolated cities protected by mystical barriers from demons and a savage race known as the Fari. A sense of foreboding permeates these isolated enclaves as the demons increase in number and strength.

Aimee Fallon, an impulsive and curious creator of magical gadgets, discovers a mysterious artifact that is the key to stopping a corrupting power reawakened after centuries of dormancy—the source of the demons. She sets out with a group led by her mentor to put it back to rest.

However, Aimee soon discovers her allies and enemies are not as simple as she first suspected. She finds herself abandoned and facing a new master of the ancient magic, the hostile lands of the wild, and a forbidden lover who suspects her of murdering his kin. Aimee doesn’t believe she has a heroic bone in her body, but fate isn’t consulting her.

THE DEAD MOUNTAIN is a 120,000-word tale blending fast-paced adventure, romance, and betrayal. It’s a story in the tradition of epic fantasy but with a female hero who relies more on her wits and determination than on swinging swords and slinging spells.

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Sound decent? I'm not sure if it's short enough though. It's about 190 words right now. On the plus side (for creative definitions of the word "plus") I have no credentials to talk about so I should have a little extra space when fitting everything on one page.


hippocampus - Jan 26, 2011 5:25:57 am PST #3945 of 6690
not your mom's socks.

Gud - I'm trapped at home with sick people, in the snow, and my editorial pen got loose - I adjusted some phrasing and moved some adjectives around. See what you think/take it or leave it/ et. Word count needs to be what?

[one question - Where are we? "On [PLANET]," or "In [TIME]" might frame it]

Humanity exists on the brink, hunted by demons and a savage race known as the Fari. The survivors are barricaded in cities protected only by mystical barriers. A sense of foreboding permeates these enclaves as the demons increase in number and strength.

Aimee Fallon, a creator of magical gadgets, discovers a mysterious artifact that is the key to stopping the source of the demons - a corrupting power reawakened after centuries of dormancy. She sets out with a group led by her mentor to put it back to rest.

However, Aimee soon discovers that allies and enemies are simple terms for much more complex relationships than she first suspected. She finds herself alone, up against the new master of the ancient magic, the hostile lands of the wild, and a forbidden lover who suspects her of murdering his kin. The cause seems lost, especially because Aimee doesn’t believe she has a heroic bone in her body. But fate isn’t consulting her.

THE DEAD MOUNTAIN is a 120,000-word tale blending fast-paced adventure, romance, and betrayal. It’s a story in the tradition of epic fantasy, but with a female hero who relies more on her wits and determination than on swinging swords and slinging spells.