nice, Ginger! I like how it starts as a wide perspective and zooms in to end with a tight focus on one person.
Wolf, it's unprompted - jump in!
I walk. I talk. I shop, I sneeze. I'm gonna be a fireman when the floods roll back. There's trees in the desert since you moved out. And I don't sleep on a bed of bones.
Buffy ,'Chosen'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
hippocampus - Nov 16, 2010 11:28:37 am PST #3728 of 6692
not your mom's socks.
Toddson - Nov 16, 2010 4:31:12 pm PST #3729 of 6692
Friends don't let friends read "Atlas Shrugged"
free-floating drabbles - nice!
And Sox - I thought birthday party clowns were scary ... now I have a new nightmare. Can't thank you enough.
hippocampus - Nov 16, 2010 4:42:14 pm PST #3730 of 6692
not your mom's socks.
... now I have a new nightmare.
you and me both, Todd.
Wolfram - Nov 17, 2010 2:10:38 pm PST #3731 of 6692
Visilurking
Indirection
One labcoat was shouting numbers, while another handed various shiny items to a third. Something kept beeping. Shifting white figures huddled over her, on the inside of the pale blue partitions. I strained to see my wife, but could only glimpse tiny swatches of paisley hospital garb. I sat and waited for someone to tell me what to do.
I was handed the baby. Swaddled, with eyes half-open. I looked up to catch the younger nurse looking away. The doctor came over to say she was so sorry. I nodded and waited for someone to tell me what to do.
erikaj - Nov 18, 2010 10:04:51 am PST #3732 of 6692
Always Anti-fascist!
Chapters: Should I think long or short or what?
Gudanov - Nov 18, 2010 10:12:57 am PST #3733 of 6692
Coding and Sleeping
I don't think there's a right size for a chapter. Long enough to end in places that make the reader want to say "Okay, one more chapter."
erikaj - Nov 18, 2010 10:24:59 am PST #3734 of 6692
Always Anti-fascist!
I don't know where that is.
Amy - Nov 18, 2010 10:29:56 am PST #3735 of 6692
Because books.
A chapter's sort of like a paragraph. You want it to be one logical, complete thought.
erikaj - Nov 18, 2010 10:42:04 am PST #3736 of 6692
Always Anti-fascist!
Ok, something to keep in mind. Maybe I should write it and break it up later...maybe people with more sequential minds don't have to do that, but it might be an LD thing.
hippocampus - Nov 18, 2010 11:33:22 am PST #3737 of 6692
not your mom's socks.
Wolfram, that's intense!