Re-reading for more coherent details on that. I read through quickly just jotting quick notes so as to not interrupt the flow. The rhythm and flow from chapter to chapter was so smooth and the transitions very clever. Going back now on that chapter to see why I didn't think it flowed as well.

Allyson, you have a wonderful talent for telling a story. I felt like a little kid sitting at your feet listening to tales with eyes wide open.

Back to re-read and get all nit picky again!

Sorry I didn't get past chapter two. I'm a bit over-committed this weekend.

Allyson, may I let Kara read it? She's 3rd grade, so close to your target audience. The profile addy's good.

I'd be honored. Insent.

No worries, Gud. I'm in the midst of beta reading a book on arrow of time, and woefully behind. I feel your over-committed.

I was under the impression that the clock ran out this weekend, but if commenting past that time is useful, I can do more.

Thanks, Allyson!

"Oh, he's a bat! And so is his mom!"..."He's a boy. No one likes girl stories like I do."..."Ohhh, he's only one inch tall!"

And now there's complete silence.

That's great! Unless the silence is because she tossed it in the recycling bin and went outside to play.

I expected feedback from both beta reader exchange people this weekend and no love. I know people get busy but the thing that keeps going through my mind is that nobody is getting back with me because it sucks so bad.

Allyson, I can do more if you want, just not until after today. Also if you want my audio files I can give them to you before I erase them, you can hear your book read in a soft Scottish accent.

Oh no. She was completely absorbed. She didn't know what brambles are, and she didn't know what "spirit of his entire colony, all 84 thousand 6oo and 92 of them" (typed from her dictation) means, exactly, but thought it had something to do with feeling like he was back home. In the cave. Where his mom... DIED. She giggled out loud at one point, but I didn't want to interrupt her to find out where.

She read through page 22 and then went to watch cartoons. She said she'll read more tomorrow, but "it's reaaaally long, Mom." She told me to tell you also that it's AWE. SOME. She plans to email you when she's finished.

For perspective, she's the best reader in her 3rd grade class.