Sorry I didn't get past chapter two. I'm a bit over-committed this weekend.
Spike: We got a history, him and me. Fred: What? Spike: It was a long time ago. He was a young Watcher, fresh out of the academy when we crossed paths. It was a, what-you-call battle of wills and blood was spilled. Vendettas were sworn. It was a whole-- Fred: My God you're so full of crap. Spike: Yeah. Okay.
'Unleashed'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Gudanov - Sep 12, 2009 5:38:03 pm PDT #2187 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
Deena - Sep 12, 2009 6:53:15 pm PDT #2188 of 6690
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Allyson, may I let Kara read it? She's 3rd grade, so close to your target audience. The profile addy's good.
Allyson - Sep 12, 2009 7:21:46 pm PDT #2189 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
I'd be honored. Insent.
No worries, Gud. I'm in the midst of beta reading a book on arrow of time, and woefully behind. I feel your over-committed.
Gudanov - Sep 12, 2009 7:29:15 pm PDT #2190 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
I was under the impression that the clock ran out this weekend, but if commenting past that time is useful, I can do more.
Deena - Sep 13, 2009 6:42:08 am PDT #2191 of 6690
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Thanks, Allyson!
"Oh, he's a bat! And so is his mom!"..."He's a boy. No one likes girl stories like I do."..."Ohhh, he's only one inch tall!"
And now there's complete silence.
Allyson - Sep 13, 2009 9:16:33 am PDT #2192 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
That's great! Unless the silence is because she tossed it in the recycling bin and went outside to play.
Gudanov - Sep 13, 2009 10:03:10 am PDT #2193 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
I expected feedback from both beta reader exchange people this weekend and no love. I know people get busy but the thing that keeps going through my mind is that nobody is getting back with me because it sucks so bad.
Gudanov - Sep 13, 2009 10:04:42 am PDT #2194 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
Allyson, I can do more if you want, just not until after today. Also if you want my audio files I can give them to you before I erase them, you can hear your book read in a soft Scottish accent.
Deena - Sep 13, 2009 10:16:14 am PDT #2195 of 6690
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Oh no. She was completely absorbed. She didn't know what brambles are, and she didn't know what "spirit of his entire colony, all 84 thousand 6oo and 92 of them" (typed from her dictation) means, exactly, but thought it had something to do with feeling like he was back home. In the cave. Where his mom... DIED. She giggled out loud at one point, but I didn't want to interrupt her to find out where.
She read through page 22 and then went to watch cartoons. She said she'll read more tomorrow, but "it's reaaaally long, Mom." She told me to tell you also that it's AWE. SOME. She plans to email you when she's finished.
For perspective, she's the best reader in her 3rd grade class.
Allyson - Sep 13, 2009 11:41:48 am PDT #2196 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
If you feel like it, Gud, I'm always happy to receive feedback, but it would be too late to incorporate it.
Thanks for letting Kara read it, Deena!