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insent Allyson
It's simple. I slap 'em around a bit, torture 'em, make their lives hell...Sure, the nice guys'll run away,but every now and then you'll find a prince like Spike who gets off on it.
Buffy ,'Get It Done'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Laura - Sep 12, 2009 3:35:28 pm PDT #2184 of 6690
Our wings are not tired.
Allyson - Sep 12, 2009 3:59:24 pm PDT #2185 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Just read it, and agree with you on the stickiness of the vampire bat chapter. Loved your feedback! So happy.
Laura - Sep 12, 2009 4:14:08 pm PDT #2186 of 6690
Our wings are not tired.
Re-reading for more coherent details on that. I read through quickly just jotting quick notes so as to not interrupt the flow. The rhythm and flow from chapter to chapter was so smooth and the transitions very clever. Going back now on that chapter to see why I didn't think it flowed as well.
Allyson, you have a wonderful talent for telling a story. I felt like a little kid sitting at your feet listening to tales with eyes wide open.
Back to re-read and get all nit picky again!
Gudanov - Sep 12, 2009 5:38:03 pm PDT #2187 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
Sorry I didn't get past chapter two. I'm a bit over-committed this weekend.
Deena - Sep 12, 2009 6:53:15 pm PDT #2188 of 6690
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Allyson, may I let Kara read it? She's 3rd grade, so close to your target audience. The profile addy's good.
Allyson - Sep 12, 2009 7:21:46 pm PDT #2189 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
I'd be honored. Insent.
No worries, Gud. I'm in the midst of beta reading a book on arrow of time, and woefully behind. I feel your over-committed.
Gudanov - Sep 12, 2009 7:29:15 pm PDT #2190 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
I was under the impression that the clock ran out this weekend, but if commenting past that time is useful, I can do more.
Deena - Sep 13, 2009 6:42:08 am PDT #2191 of 6690
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Thanks, Allyson!
"Oh, he's a bat! And so is his mom!"..."He's a boy. No one likes girl stories like I do."..."Ohhh, he's only one inch tall!"
And now there's complete silence.
Allyson - Sep 13, 2009 9:16:33 am PDT #2192 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
That's great! Unless the silence is because she tossed it in the recycling bin and went outside to play.
Gudanov - Sep 13, 2009 10:03:10 am PDT #2193 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
I expected feedback from both beta reader exchange people this weekend and no love. I know people get busy but the thing that keeps going through my mind is that nobody is getting back with me because it sucks so bad.