In one of the first acts of revision I nixed the name 'Elf' for one of the races. I'm very happy about this since it was more of a placeholder than a description of the race. I've got a name now that has two different meanings in Old High German and Swedish that are both appropriate to the race.

Gudanov - is it impolite and improper to ask what word you went with? I, amateur philologist and linguist, am forced to ask. :)

Here it is,

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Oooo! That's NEW to me! Danke - vielen Danke! I'm seriously gleeful (and therefore seriously in need of help)

Chapter 1 will be a total loss. Pretty much as expected though. Chapter 2 will get axed pretty hard too. All for the best.

I've started revising. I chopped off all the stuff that happened before the action in chapter 1 and I'm rewriting the action sequence itself. Chapter 2 shouldn't be quite as drastic as chapter 1, but it still will get mauled pretty badly. Chapter 3 should stay pretty intact.

I'm getting closer to revised chapter 1. However, partly that is because chapter 1 is shorter and a bit of it is pushed into chapter 2. It seems better to me. My wife says it is way better so far.

My wife has been extensively researching revision. She tends to research things, it's a thing. Anyhow she applied that research to part of chapter 16 and concluded that she isn't going to be able to help me much with general revision. This is just fine with me, because I can't really see wanting to use anything I didn't write (aside from typo correction and such). Also, I kinda think I'm a bit better at dialogue and description though that's probably because it's my story rather than just general ability. Though I also think she took some revision advice a bit too much at heart. She removed a good amount of descriptive narrative as unnecessary and it made it read flat to me.

Gud, it sounds like she's interested (and maybe would like to write something of her own one day?), but there are no hard and fast rules to revision. Cutting out all the descriptors is ... not a good idea. *Some*, maybe, but not all.

Plus, even editors don't go in and just make wholesale changes. You make suggestions, and you explain *why* you're making them, and you have to trust your author, at some point, because it's his or her voice, and story.

It sounds like you're rocking right along, though. And as long as you know what you want, then stick with it.

I'm moving along, but I'm looking forward getting to a part where I'm not completely rewriting everything.