Chapter 19 is done. It will need a bit of work, but not too bad. I'm now about a page into Chapter 20. Moving along.
Weird love's better than no love.
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The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
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Gudanov - Jun 04, 2009 5:47:42 am PDT #1646 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
Gudanov - Jun 05, 2009 5:30:08 am PDT #1647 of 6690
Coding and Sleeping
Now about 1700 words into chapter 20. After revising my high level outline, it looks like it will be 28 chapters and a brief epilogue.
Liese S. - Jun 05, 2009 9:50:57 am PDT #1648 of 6690
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."
Doing great! Keep at it!
Typo Boy - Jun 05, 2009 10:40:13 am PDT #1649 of 6690
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
I know "ongepatshket" is a very obscure Yiddish expression. But is it clear enough from context to be OK in the following context?
We have ongepatshket our forests to the point we must clear brush from some of them or they will act as tinder, converting small fires to big ones."
Or is use of obscure dialect too distracting even if people can figure it out from context?
SailAweigh - Jun 05, 2009 10:42:04 am PDT #1650 of 6690
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Maybe if it was easier to pronounce, typo. I stumble over it so badly, I lose all sense of the sentence afterward.
Scrappy - Jun 05, 2009 10:42:19 am PDT #1651 of 6690
Life moves pretty fast. You don't stop and look around once in a while, you could miss it.
I know the expression, but if I didn't, I think I would find that usage off-putting. Just having to sound it out in my head was a distraction.
Typo Boy - Jun 05, 2009 10:43:33 am PDT #1652 of 6690
Calli: My people have a saying. A man who trusts can never be betrayed, only mistaken.Avon: Life expectancy among your people must be extremely short.
OK, that makes sense. Out it goes. (Really, when I wonder "should I keep this", I should remember that if I have to ask the answer is almost certainly "No".)
Burrell - Jun 05, 2009 10:43:48 am PDT #1653 of 6690
Why did Darth Vader cross the road? To get to the Dark Side!
I suspect you are asking because you think it's too obscure. In which case it's too obscure.
amych - Jun 05, 2009 10:43:59 am PDT #1654 of 6690
Now let us crush something soft and watch it fountain blood. That is a girlish thing to want to do, yes?
It's neither familiar nor clear from context to me -- for reference, I'd rate my Yiddish knowledge above average compared to the gen. pop., but nowhere near the level of someone who's actually studied it.
amych - Jun 05, 2009 10:43:59 am PDT #1655 of 6690
Now let us crush something soft and watch it fountain blood. That is a girlish thing to want to do, yes?
Also, I'm double-posty today.