Amy, thanks again for your comments! As for the rest of you beta-ers...
clears throat
Seriously, if you guys get a chance let me know what you think, even if it's just a thumb up or down. Thanks again.
Right. Sir. Honey.
Zoe ,'The Train Job'
The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Wolfram - Mar 16, 2009 7:26:29 am PDT #1306 of 6690
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Beverly - Mar 16, 2009 8:01:05 am PDT #1307 of 6690
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Wolfram, I'm dying to read it. Timing is bad though, because I'm distracted and my attention isn't good right now. You've got good people to critique, though. I hope I see it in print!
Wolfram - Mar 16, 2009 9:07:20 am PDT #1308 of 6690
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Thanks Bev, you and me both. If it ever does happen, this site and particularly this thread would be significantly responsible.
Amy - Mar 16, 2009 9:25:30 am PDT #1309 of 6690
Because books.
Did you not send it out yet, Wolfram?
Wolfram - Mar 16, 2009 9:50:40 am PDT #1310 of 6690
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No, we were looking for feedback by now so we could use this week for final edits and submit this Friday. (Not that we have to send it out then either, but my writing partner is very deadline-conscious, even for the self-imposed kind. I'm just the opposite, and would push and push the deadline until I'd agonized over each word and phrase 100 times.)
Right now he's rewriting my last rewrite (which will include some changes based on your comments, Amy), and I expect we'll be volleying back and forth until the end. Our collaboration has gone way better than I expected, though we're having a little trouble consensing on the ending. (Spoilerfonted not to ruin it for the betas): I want it to end on a down tempo with the protagonist in despair, and he's pushing to end it more upbeat with the protagonist reflecting a sense of hope.
I'm pretty psyched about the work in general and comments from other people we've shown have been uniformly positive so that's good.
Amy - Mar 16, 2009 10:49:48 am PDT #1311 of 6690
Because books.
Well, for what it's worth, I absolutely see it ending as you envision it, Wolfram.
Wolfram - Mar 16, 2009 12:26:30 pm PDT #1312 of 6690
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I think Tim has ruined story-telling for me, because I'm finding the pain far more interesting than the happy.
SailAweigh - Mar 16, 2009 6:37:34 pm PDT #1313 of 6690
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
I apologize for taking so long, Wolfram. I wanted to print the story out for reading and note taking, but my printer's been acting like a prima donna lately. I've had to send the story off to my dad, so he could print it out. Is tommorow too late to get back to you?
Wolfram - Mar 16, 2009 7:13:03 pm PDT #1314 of 6690
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No, Sail, comments would be more helpful as soon before Friday as possible, but even after Friday I'm really interested in feedback both for future submissions of this story and in general to help improve my writing. Thanks for asking and for volunteering your time.
Atropa - Mar 19, 2009 10:13:22 am PDT #1315 of 6690
The artist formerly associated with cupcakes.
I WILL HAVE BOUND PROOFS OF THE BOOK SOMETIME NEXT WEEK!!