Can't even shout, Can't even cry. The Gentlemen are coming by. Looking in windows, knocking on doors. They need to take seven, and they might take yours. Can't call to mom, can't say a word. You're gonna die screaming but you won't be heard.

Dream Girl ,'Bring On The Night'


Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies  

Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.


Am-Chau Yarkona - Jun 12, 2003 1:51:28 am PDT #4061 of 10001
I bop to Wittgenstein. -- Nutty

“Well, this is a tiny selection compared with what I’d have available on a core planet. Of course, there it would mostly be done on computers, or by a nurse; but as an intern, I was expected to have a grasp of how to do this without such aids.”

“Top three percent and all,” Mal said, but the remainder that Simon looked down on the situation here as less than ideal had stung a little. He didn’t like being forced to remember that his boat wasn’t the greatest place in the ‘verse—as far as some were concerned.

“… not the most difficult part,” Simon was saying, and Mal realised he hadn’t been paying attention. “Many of my classmates struggled with it, but I found learning emergency room procedures a lot more difficult. I didn’t learn well when there was real pressure.”

Mal nodded. “Ah.”

“What about you, captain?” Simon was still working, but now his eyes sought Mal’s between checking labels and places. “I… did okay at school, I guess. Graduated, joined the army ‘cos I thought it was right.”

“Do you still think that? That it was right?”

“The Alliance taking over the whole ‘verse ain’t right, I know that much.”

“Is that what it’s about, stopping them taking over?”

“Stopping them winning. Stopping them takin’ over the ‘verse and doing like they did to your sister to every clever girl.”

“Captain, I don’t think…” Simon’s voice trailed off. When he let himself, he *did* think. “I mean, it’s possible, but…”

“But what?” Mal asked.

Simon met Mal’s blue eyes. His mind went blank, and then spiralled away down a different path: //but… butt… nice butt… Captain Tightpants, Kaylee had called him. She was right, Mal’s backside was…// Simon didn’t dare wonder when he’d noticed. He forced himself look away from Mal and try and formulate an answer.

“I got River out,” Simon replied at last, “No point thinking about anything else until I’ve worked out what they did to her.”

He only wished he could stop thinking pointless thoughts, like how Mal looked when…

Aware that he’d stopped moving, Simon turned and walked the four paces across the infirmary to the cabinet where he kept the rest of the drugs.

Watching him every step of the way, Mal twisted on the bench until he was lying down, stretched out, chin propped up on one hand, and able to see the doctor wherever he went in the room.

“You never did tell me exactly how that underground group sprung her.”

“I’m not clear of the details myself. In essence, though, I believe they…” Simon began. He’d been preparing this, knowing that Mal or Zoe or Jayne or Wash or someone—maybe even River herself—would ask one day, and that made it easy to answer without being distracted. “…bribed someone within the compound to help them get through the security…”

//Well, at least I’m not dreaming,// Mal thought, letting his eyelids droop a little as he gazed at Simon, who was still talking, apparently quite happy to go on all night. “…must have been very dangerous, but I suppose they took very precaution they could. I paid them enough…”

Mal’s eyes closed. //I can listen with them shut,// he told himself. It wasn’t very convincing, even from inside.

A couple of sentences later, Mal was asleep, dreaming that he…

… walks, long, easy strides, along the metal corridors that let a person move around Serenity.

The cargo, he knows, is sold, though he can’t recall what it was; the crew are all aboard, the passengers are safe, and the ship is humming happily. Somewhere above, in the engine room, Kaylee is humming, a little cheerful counterpoint to the simple mechanical drone.

He can hear Simon’s voice, distant, talking in the soothing way he does when his sister needs calming.

Mal smiles. The dream ends, fading into darkness, and he sleeps on, peacefully.


esse - Jun 12, 2003 3:26:09 am PDT #4062 of 10001
S to the A -- using they/them pronouns!

Oh, Plei. Acceptable Buffy/Xander (please excuse my shudder) and absolutely marvelous other fic.

Nice, Am. Yummy Mal.


Am-Chau Yarkona - Jun 12, 2003 3:34:08 am PDT #4063 of 10001
I bop to Wittgenstein. -- Nutty

Thanks, SA.


Cindy - Jun 12, 2003 5:04:46 am PDT #4064 of 10001
Nobody

I'm opinion-fishing.

What are your (all y'all) thoughts on having a character narrate a story (specifically fan fic)?

Does it get too confusing when more than one character narrates? Does it feel too contrived?

I've read some original fiction (can't think of one off of the top of my head now that I've brought it up) that's used more than one character as narrator. It seems to me I've liked it. Certainly, I've liked original ficiton narrated by the protagonist.


Am-Chau Yarkona - Jun 12, 2003 5:16:29 am PDT #4065 of 10001
I bop to Wittgenstein. -- Nutty

Using first person can work really well; having a character give a narration that's outside the story, from the 'future', for example, can also work well.

It depends a lot on the details of what you're doing and how well you do it. It needn't feel contrived, depending which method you pick exactly (don't have someone narrate a story by writing in their diary if it's canon that they hate writing); and even using more than one narrator needn't be confusing if you mark changes clearly and limit yourself a bit.

Well, that's what I think, anyway. I love writing in first person and using narration in various different ways.


Dana - Jun 12, 2003 5:35:59 am PDT #4066 of 10001
I'm terrifically busy with my ennui.

What are your (all y'all) thoughts on having a character narrate a story (specifically fan fic)?

Does it get too confusing when more than one character narrates? Does it feel too contrived?

By narrate, do you mean that you're telling the story in first person? I don't have a problem with it, and I don't have a problem with multiple characters being used, because if it's done right, the character voices are sufficiently different that there's not any kind of confusion. A first-person Buffy POV is significantly different from a Xander POV, and even more different from a Giles POV.


Cindy - Jun 12, 2003 7:02:01 am PDT #4067 of 10001
Nobody

By narrate, do you mean that you're telling the story in first person?

Yes, I mean telling the story, but in cases where the character is describing another character, her pov would be limited, not omniscient.

I've gotten completely stuck on my mega fic. I was using a 3rd person, ltd pov, but it's limiting me. I think I want each (main) character to tell his own bits of the story.

Thanks - Am-Chau and Dana.


P.M. Marc - Jun 12, 2003 7:11:59 am PDT #4068 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear

I do a lot of 3rd person limited POV swapping. Each section (and sometimes they overlap, so I get the same scene or parts of from a different POV) with a different narrator/voice.

Absolution (my large-for-me fic) had five different character POVs.


Cindy - Jun 12, 2003 7:14:48 am PDT #4069 of 10001
Nobody

I'll probably end up with 5. I know I'll at least end up with 3.


P.M. Marc - Jun 12, 2003 7:17:45 am PDT #4070 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear

I distinctly remember just GLOWERING at Angel because he wanted to narrate. I was all like, "Hairloaf? Excuse me? What makes you think you get to say anything, fucko?"

But he insisted.