Oh, God. Oh, God. My hair. My hair! The government gave me bad hair!

Cordelia ,'The Cautionary Tale of Numero Cinco'


Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies  

Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.


Rebecca Lizard - May 03, 2003 8:33:26 pm PDT #3736 of 10001
You sip / say it's your crazy / straw say it's you're crazy / as you bicycle your soul / with beauty in your basket

The stone dust is settling onto the grass of the graveyard, the leather of her shoes. She almost tries hitting another stone just out of curiosity, to see if it'll disintegrate, too, but stops herself in time. Instead Willow brushes the dust off her feet, and after one last look at the distant, shaking sky, she chooses a direction at random and starts walking, out to the dark band of the horizon, into the black and featureless night.

And it's weird because things get darker, actually darker, like the way on a foggy day you look down the street and you can't see the end of the block at all. And once you walk down there the air is just as thin and clear as usual-- it's where you just were that's now shrouded in mist. But it's not happening the way it ought to, the way it should be happening, as she's walking forward the air in front of her is getting *thicker*, she'd swear it, it's practically inky with blackness, and it's getting harder to breathe. The grass squishes under her feet less and less audibly until it's not there at all. When she looks behind her half-expecting the graveyard to be the one bright spot in a dark and flat landscape, a tiny suspended tableau of spinning stars and white gravestones, it's gone. There's nothing there, even now, and Willow feels its absence like a sudden, ridiculous stab of pain in the chest. Or is that the effort of trying to breathe now? Willow thinks she's stopped walking but she can't be entirely sure. It feels like something's still pushing her forwards, and she's starting to cough on the air, it's getting dense and practically oily, like the noxious smoke from a refinery plant; and she drops her head and she's choking, and for one endless, unpleasant moment she's not drawing any breath in at all, it's just tightness in her throat, and that's the second before Willow remembers that this is just a dream.

And in dreams you don't need to breathe. Is that right? Professor Walsh talked about dreams, when-- it must have been years ago. What did Willow's lecture notes say? She can see, in her mind, the pages of neat handwriting in colored pens, but the words fuzz and disappear into the elusiveness of memory. She'd have to remember it on her own. Dreams. Transcendation onto a different plane. (Transubstantiation? No, that's Christianity.) Vampires have dreams, right? They can access it; and they don't need to breathe. But they don't breathe while awake, either. Maybe dreams are just the exploration of an internal reality, in which case the features of the everyday body wouldn't be transcended but, rather, exaggerated. The way you sometimes can walk in dreams but you can't walk, you're wobbling, weakened, falling over, and maybe that's because it's not your muscles actually moving but rather the muscle memory working in your brain, oh, the little map your brain has of your own body, what is it called, she read an article somewhere. But--

Dreams. Breathe. Dreams. It's a full minute before she realizes that she *is* pulling in breath, fast and greedy, lungs uncramping to take the air into her chest. Willow looks up cautiously and the scenery slams back down around her: empty parking lot, alley leading to the street, asphalt cold and solid through her jeans. It's the lot behind the haircutter's place, half a block away from the Magic Box. She knows where she is now.

Willow gets to her feet, slowly, and takes a step in the direction of the Magic Box. For a moment it looks as though nothing is wrong, and then the pavement cracks and bends like thin sheeted metal under her feet. She

... and that's still all I have at the moment.


Rebecca Lizard - May 03, 2003 8:34:48 pm PDT #3737 of 10001
You sip / say it's your crazy / straw say it's you're crazy / as you bicycle your soul / with beauty in your basket

cereal:

Ooh, and, Deb, would you start posting these fics in your LJ? It would be wonderful to be able to point people towards them.


deborah grabien - May 03, 2003 8:36:49 pm PDT #3738 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

WHOA.

Keep it going, Liz. WHere's the rest...?


deborah grabien - May 03, 2003 8:43:32 pm PDT #3739 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Liz, angela mia, we're crossposting like mad.

1. Only one thing I'd suggest about any of what you just wrote, and it may just be the way my browser is set up: are the words within stars (*is*) to be read as emphasised? In place of italics (put in for clarity)? Because there's a few places where you've emphasised where, believe me, the language is so damned vivid, it speaks for itself and makes the mechanical emphasis no more than a tickle, or a distraction (example would be that bit about: But it's not happening the way it ought to, the way it should be happening, as she's walking forward the air in front of her is getting *thicker*, she'd swear it, it's practically inky with blackness, and it's getting harder to breathe.) That doesn't need emphasis; it's implicit in the outrageously vivid description.

Re posting Notte, Sanguina to my LJ, I need to find out what CaBil and Ms Havisham have as a policy regarding anthology inclusions being previewed in real time. That's a publisher's perogative, so I'll need to check with them first. The other two Darla-in-Tuscany bitlets are up at shriftweb.


P.M. Marc - May 03, 2003 8:43:40 pm PDT #3740 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear

Wow, Lizard. I'm loving.


Rebecca Lizard - May 03, 2003 8:53:55 pm PDT #3741 of 10001
You sip / say it's your crazy / straw say it's you're crazy / as you bicycle your soul / with beauty in your basket

t dances

Story's still kicking my ass-- I've covered point A, and I know what point C is (hopefully, I say, with the HSQ), but I'm still doodling around point B.

are the words within stars (*is*) to be read as emphasised? In place of italics (put in for clarity)?

Yes'm. That's just for the BFA, which converts asterisks to italicisation.

Because there's a few places where you've emphasised where, believe me, the language is so damned vivid, it speaks for itself and makes the mechanical emphasis no more than a tickle, or a distraction (example would be that bit about: But it's not happening the way it ought to, the way it should be happening, as she's walking forward the air in front of her is getting *thicker*, she'd swear it, it's practically inky with blackness, and it's getting harder to breathe.) That doesn't need emphasis; it's implicit in the outrageously vivid description.

You have a good point, m'lady. I was thinking too hard about having the Willow-voice in FID, & I got ahead of myself with the line-direction tricks, especially word-emphasis, and over-long sentences, and, um. I'll sweep through and correct those.


deborah grabien - May 03, 2003 8:58:05 pm PDT #3742 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

I used to emphasise a lot (and trust me, it was a lot trickier in the Time Before Computers, known by the Many Tribes as the Selectric Epoch). I starfted paying attention to it when I was writing something in more than one language (Weaver's sequel has a lot of French, because the ghost was French while alive, and what's more, some of it is patois medieval shit), and it had to be differentiated on paper, shown to be of the ghostatude.

That kinda made the whole soul-searching, or rather the soul search and replacing, of any non-vital italics, pretty much mandatory.

I'm loving Willow walking through dream within dream. And I wonder what's watching her dream....


Rebecca Lizard - May 03, 2003 9:24:10 pm PDT #3743 of 10001
You sip / say it's your crazy / straw say it's you're crazy / as you bicycle your soul / with beauty in your basket

That kinda made the whole soul-searching, or rather the soul search and replacing, of any non-vital italics, pretty much mandatory.

Oh, yes.

My mother hates italics. She'd like to see them all cut down and burned to death. But they're so prettty, I say. Look. Look! How can you not like that?

... Anyway.


deborah grabien - May 03, 2003 9:36:25 pm PDT #3744 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

Heheheh.

I still do use them. I just don't use them as much.


Elena - May 04, 2003 1:07:34 pm PDT #3745 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.

Plei, one question

and dollar well drinks.

What's that?