WHOA.

Keep it going, Liz. WHere's the rest...?

Liz, angela mia, we're crossposting like mad.

1. Only one thing I'd suggest about any of what you just wrote, and it may just be the way my browser is set up: are the words within stars (*is*) to be read as emphasised? In place of italics (put in for clarity)? Because there's a few places where you've emphasised where, believe me, the language is so damned vivid, it speaks for itself and makes the mechanical emphasis no more than a tickle, or a distraction (example would be that bit about: But it's not happening the way it ought to, the way it should be happening, as she's walking forward the air in front of her is getting *thicker*, she'd swear it, it's practically inky with blackness, and it's getting harder to breathe.) That doesn't need emphasis; it's implicit in the outrageously vivid description.

Re posting Notte, Sanguina to my LJ, I need to find out what CaBil and Ms Havisham have as a policy regarding anthology inclusions being previewed in real time. That's a publisher's perogative, so I'll need to check with them first. The other two Darla-in-Tuscany bitlets are up at shriftweb.

Wow, Lizard. I'm loving.

t dances

Story's still kicking my ass-- I've covered point A, and I know what point C is (hopefully, I say, with the HSQ), but I'm still doodling around point B.

are the words within stars (*is*) to be read as emphasised? In place of italics (put in for clarity)?

Yes'm. That's just for the BFA, which converts asterisks to italicisation.

Because there's a few places where you've emphasised where, believe me, the language is so damned vivid, it speaks for itself and makes the mechanical emphasis no more than a tickle, or a distraction (example would be that bit about: But it's not happening the way it ought to, the way it should be happening, as she's walking forward the air in front of her is getting *thicker*, she'd swear it, it's practically inky with blackness, and it's getting harder to breathe.) That doesn't need emphasis; it's implicit in the outrageously vivid description.

You have a good point, m'lady. I was thinking too hard about having the Willow-voice in FID, & I got ahead of myself with the line-direction tricks, especially word-emphasis, and over-long sentences, and, um. I'll sweep through and correct those.

I used to emphasise a lot (and trust me, it was a lot trickier in the Time Before Computers, known by the Many Tribes as the Selectric Epoch). I starfted paying attention to it when I was writing something in more than one language (Weaver's sequel has a lot of French, because the ghost was French while alive, and what's more, some of it is patois medieval shit), and it had to be differentiated on paper, shown to be of the ghostatude.

That kinda made the whole soul-searching, or rather the soul search and replacing, of any non-vital italics, pretty much mandatory.

I'm loving Willow walking through dream within dream. And I wonder what's watching her dream....

That kinda made the whole soul-searching, or rather the soul search and replacing, of any non-vital italics, pretty much mandatory.

Oh, yes.

My mother hates italics. She'd like to see them all cut down and burned to death. But they're so prettty, I say. Look. Look! How can you not like that?

... Anyway.

Heheheh.

I still do use them. I just don't use them as much.

Plei, one question

and dollar well drinks.

What's that?

Elena, a well drink is the standard mix from the standard (no-name) booze for standard drinks at bars.

As opposed to a call drink. Tanq and Tonic or Maker's Manhattan or Chivas and Soda would be call drinks, because you're requesting the specific booze. Gin and Tonic, or Manhattan, or Scotch and Soda would be well drinks, made with whatever.

Well drinks are often cheap as hell during Happy Hour. Long Live Happy Hour.

Huh. Never heard that before. I think we just call them bar shots.