And posted. Now we see

Okay, you all had me intrigued. Could I do this? (and blast it, I thought it was 100 words- reposted with 200) So, what do you think?

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Wes thought the note, “Sunset Motel, Room 233. She dies.” was a trap, so, you know, send the spare guy who doesn’t know mumbo jumbo or ancient Sumerian or whatever crap it was they thought might give a them clue to beat this First Evil chick.

“Be discreet, my ass.” The stupid gun stuck to his fingers, despite the slick weight of it. He stuffed it in his pocket and wiped his hands on his pant legs before touching the door.

Unlocked. He pushed and the door swung open. A roil of cheap air freshener and blood made him want to gag.

“Whew.”

A blond, her back to the door, sat on the floor, back bent, awkwardly cradling the body of another girl, while blood seeped into cheap brown carpet, dark into darker. His head jerked reflexively. Nothing special about bodies. Too bad he’d gotten there just a little too late.

He nodded bodyward. "Who’s the stiff?” The blond twitched, but didn’t look at him.

Okay, that might not have been sensitive. “Buffy?”

She looked up. Blood smeared her chin and open mouth.

He blinked, thinking of the gun in his pocket. “Shit. Thanks Wes. I shoulda brought the ax.”

Heheheheheh.

Deena, that's fun. It made me jump, and then I was grinning because it made me jump.

I like it.

Hee. NICE!

THANK YOU!

god, I was sweaty palmed. Do you KNOW how many minutes it's been since I posted that?

I love you both... of course, I already did, but, you know, had to say it again.

I went and read some of the ones posted and thought ICK! about mine.

Also? My very first ever fanfic. I'm no longer a fic virgin.

Very fun Deena. And yay for your first fic! I still haven't gotten there yet.

Deena! You popped your fic-cherry!

So, you going to post it up at the site?

It's funny, I was whining to ita elsewhere that I thought my stuff might be too esoteric for most fic-taste, since the only feedback I've got on any of it came from readers I know, except for the one original response to Pensioner. And hey, presto! someone actually posted a comment at the site.

And now I wonder if ita shoved them over to do that.....?

naaaaah.

Thanks, Jilli! I'm inordinately proud of myself. I never thought I could do it.

I did post it! Just now! I'm sort of internally squeeing.

It results in strange facial contortions, but it feels good.

edit: I had to go back and refresh my memory. I didn't think it was extraordinarily esoteric, dark, perfectly wes, and very nicely done.

I think yours is one of the reasons I wasn't sure mine was descriptive enough.