100 words is barely two paragraphs.
You think! Put in some dialogue, and you can stretch it to, like, six.
Okay, okay, I'm stepping away.
Hmm. It's sounds like the finest party I can imagine getting paid to go to.
Mal ,'Shindig'
Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies
Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.
amych - Mar 26, 2003 7:09:58 pm PST #3005 of 10001
Now let us crush something soft and watch it fountain blood. That is a girlish thing to want to do, yes?
esse - Mar 26, 2003 7:11:51 pm PST #3006 of 10001
S to the A -- using they/them pronouns!
Also, I'll need a quick and dirty beta tonight/tomorrow morning. Remix, y'know?
I'll be up.
Rebecca Lizard - Mar 26, 2003 9:35:14 pm PST #3007 of 10001
You sip / say it's your crazy / straw say it's you're crazy / as you bicycle your soul / with beauty in your basket
deb, I really, really love it. You're amazing.
deborah grabien - Mar 26, 2003 9:49:23 pm PST #3008 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Rebecca! Hey sweetie. Can I send to you for archiving? I have it as a .txt file, with headers, as needed....
Rebecca Lizard - Mar 26, 2003 10:27:02 pm PST #3009 of 10001
You sip / say it's your crazy / straw say it's you're crazy / as you bicycle your soul / with beauty in your basket
Certainly. I may be a couple days, though-- I was planning to do a marathon coding session tonight, in fact, but I am so zonked I'm revisiting that plan in favor of sleep very soon.
Mm. Sleeeep.
deborah grabien - Mar 26, 2003 11:04:37 pm PST #3010 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Hotay - I forget if I sent you Needfire and Della Luna already....
Anyway, on its way.
P.M. Marc - Mar 26, 2003 11:43:09 pm PST #3011 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear
Removed now that it has been workshopped.
deborah grabien - Mar 26, 2003 11:54:31 pm PST #3012 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Plei:
Stuff I love love love:
Hates that she'll come back night after night, hoping that this time, when she touches heaven, she'll get to stay.
It isn't sleep, it isn't death, but it's not hell, and that's a start.
she'd slip out the door and off in search of someone else's death.
All very very very very good indeed.
Stuff I'd take a second look at:
So really, it's not a shock that she's not sleeping if she can avoid it.
Something wrong about "shock" as used in that context: has she been discussing it with someone else? Because the character is unlikely to be shocking herself, and this is all about Buffy, this reaction. "Hardly surprising" or "no big surprise" or "not exactly a mystery" or something, but "shock" there...?
This hollow sack of flesh and bone left something essential behind when ripped from home
I love the first part of that, but the second half is incomplete somehow. Possibly just the omitted "it was" before "ripped from home".
Needless to say, it kicks the original (a thumbnail, really) right off the stage.
P.M. Marc - Mar 26, 2003 11:58:20 pm PST #3013 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear
Changed the second to "So really, it doesn't shock her at all that she's not sleeping if she can avoid it."
added the "it was"
deborah grabien - Mar 27, 2003 12:02:02 am PST #3014 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Eeeeexcellent! (Mr Burns)
Awaiting my husband before I watch Angel. I did sneak over during West Wing commercials and caught what looked like Gunn in a suit, performing serious kempo-type foo on some dudes in grey robes. There was also a child who didn't seem to like him much....