Hmm... Ruffled by Fred and never smoothed?
Punctured by Fred and never reinflated?
Massacred by Fred and never resurrected?
Severed by Fred and never reattached?
Well, a gathering is brie, mellow song stylings; shindig, dip, less mellow song stylings, perhaps a large amount of malt beverage, and hootenanny, well, it's chock full of hoot, just a little bit of nanny.
Oz ,'Beneath You'
Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies
Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.
Elena - Mar 16, 2003 7:23:39 pm PST #2604 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
Elena - Mar 16, 2003 7:24:45 pm PST #2605 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
Smothered by Fred and never got CPR?
Withered in Fred's shadow and never brought into the light?
Elena - Mar 16, 2003 7:25:00 pm PST #2606 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
I can keep doing this.
deborah grabien - Mar 16, 2003 7:27:31 pm PST #2607 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
You want the first bit to match the second. So - upset and righted (as deb suggested) or shattered and reassembled.
That was my original take on it; "reassembly" is a highly physical mechanical term, not pairing properly with "upset". Plei said, upset as in apple cart, I imagined upset as in a sandcastle kicked over accidentally by a heedless passerby. Either way, though, reassembly is something one does with bits and pieces. So matching the two, somehow? Yup. Needs to happen.
I like Fay's suggestion, as well. But there's a certain simplicity to "righted" and the sentence itself, as Plei crafted it, is very clean and unfussy.
Elena - Mar 16, 2003 7:29:36 pm PST #2608 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
poisoned by the apple that was Fred and never awoken with a kiss from a prince.
P.M. Marc - Mar 16, 2003 7:31:44 pm PST #2609 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear
So right now we have "Theirs was a fragile peace, upset by Fred and never fully righted."
deborah grabien - Mar 16, 2003 7:46:06 pm PST #2610 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Plei, that works. It might work even better (harking back to "upset" in the sense of it having more than one shade of meaning) if you take "righted" and make it be "put right."
Theirs was a fragile peace, upset by Fred and never fully put right or "...really put right".
edit: damned floating quotation marks....
P.M. Marc - Mar 16, 2003 8:03:20 pm PST #2611 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear
Plei, that works. It might work even better (harking back to "upset" in the sense of it having more than one shade of meaning) if you take "righted" and make it be "put right."
Hee. Great minds.
I was going back and forth on it, though leaning in the direction of "put to rights".
deborah grabien - Mar 16, 2003 8:07:52 pm PST #2612 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
We are Great Minds! Hear us roar!
I'm going to post a description I just wrote (not fanfic; from the new novel).
Just because I want a take on it.
This unpleasant blurb was accompanied by a reproduction of what looked to be a cheesy bit of Pre-Raphaelite pornographic art, showing a hideously malformed shape, swooping down upon a buxom sleeping woman with an improbable mane of curls and a faint anticipatory smile on her face.
deborah grabien - Mar 16, 2003 8:09:55 pm PST #2613 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
And "put to rights", BTW, is about perfect.