Okay, feeling relieved. I can do patient. It's on my list of things to do.
Can we maybe vote on the whole murdering people issue?
Wash ,'Serenity'
Buffista Fic: It Could Be Plot Bunnies
Where the Buffistas let their fanfic creative juices flow. May contain erotica.
Deena - Mar 16, 2003 6:57:46 pm PST #2598 of 10001
How are you me? You need to stop that. Only I can be me. ~Kara
Elena - Mar 16, 2003 6:58:13 pm PST #2599 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
I like him more as a lyricist than a singer.
P.M. Marc - Mar 16, 2003 7:07:12 pm PST #2600 of 10001
So come, my friends, be not afraid/We are so lightly here/It is in love that we are made; In love we disappear
Argh. Having rewrite issues with two sentences.
Tackle #1 first: Theirs was a fragile peace, upset by Fred and never fully reassembled.
upset meaning apple cart way, of course, but...
looking for another way to say it.
deborah grabien - Mar 16, 2003 7:11:34 pm PST #2601 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
"Theirs was a fragile peace. Its balance, unwittingly upset by Fred, had never been righted (reattained)."
Off the top of the head.
I'm working on "Weaver"....
Elena - Mar 16, 2003 7:16:31 pm PST #2602 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
upset by Fred and never fully reassembled.
You want the first bit to match the second. So - upset and righted (as deb suggested) or shattered and reassembled.
Fay - Mar 16, 2003 7:21:12 pm PST #2603 of 10001
"Fuck Western ideologically-motivated gender identification!" Sulu gasped, and came.
I vote "regained".
Elena - Mar 16, 2003 7:23:39 pm PST #2604 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
Hmm... Ruffled by Fred and never smoothed?
Punctured by Fred and never reinflated?
Massacred by Fred and never resurrected?
Severed by Fred and never reattached?
Elena - Mar 16, 2003 7:24:45 pm PST #2605 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
Smothered by Fred and never got CPR?
Withered in Fred's shadow and never brought into the light?
Elena - Mar 16, 2003 7:25:00 pm PST #2606 of 10001
Thanks for all the fish.
I can keep doing this.
deborah grabien - Mar 16, 2003 7:27:31 pm PST #2607 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
You want the first bit to match the second. So - upset and righted (as deb suggested) or shattered and reassembled.
That was my original take on it; "reassembly" is a highly physical mechanical term, not pairing properly with "upset". Plei said, upset as in apple cart, I imagined upset as in a sandcastle kicked over accidentally by a heedless passerby. Either way, though, reassembly is something one does with bits and pieces. So matching the two, somehow? Yup. Needs to happen.
I like Fay's suggestion, as well. But there's a certain simplicity to "righted" and the sentence itself, as Plei crafted it, is very clean and unfussy.