Susan, liked it muchly. You made me feel it. Nova, what style? Sometimes, I'm shockingly style-free. Thank you, though. If you want to believe I'm a stylist, I shouldn't show you the woman behind the curtain, should I? But it's mostly smoke and mirrors. And cursing. And OD-ing on New Journalism.(/David Simon likes urban carrots) Deena, caustic people dying is, like, my favorite entertainment experience.
Giles, if you would like to get by in American society, then you are going to have to follow our traditions. You're the patriarch. You have to host the festivities, or it's all meaningless.
Buffy ,'Sleeper'
The Great Write Way
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
erikaj - Aug 25, 2004 11:54:54 am PDT #6171 of 10001
Always Anti-fascist!
Gris - Aug 25, 2004 2:26:34 pm PDT #6172 of 10001
Hey. New board.
Maybe it's the style-freeness that gives it such an interesting style.
deborah grabien - Aug 25, 2004 3:36:58 pm PDT #6173 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Any beta readers around?
This is the first chunk of the prologue for the new book, the one about what feeds on vampires, and why. Not a lot of it - just need to know if the style flows and the tension builds.
Pix - Aug 25, 2004 3:39:15 pm PDT #6174 of 10001
The status is NOT quo.
Deb, I'm around but can't beta right now (trying to be good myself)...but I saw your post and couldn't resist saying hello. Miss you already, bebe!
t /natter
Polter-Cow - Aug 25, 2004 3:39:19 pm PDT #6175 of 10001
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!
Vampires! I'll bite.
(Har har.)
Anne W. - Aug 25, 2004 3:41:30 pm PDT #6176 of 10001
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.
Deb, I'd be happy to help out. I can probably get comments back to you by Friday if not tomorrow.
Fay - Aug 25, 2004 3:46:56 pm PDT #6177 of 10001
"Fuck Western ideologically-motivated gender identification!" Sulu gasped, and came.
Damn. Some excellent pieces here, but I think Deb broke me. Meanwhile:
Tequila Sunrise
Cat-quiet she slides out of bed, listening to his breath hitch into a snore. One heel points at the ceiling, another sleeps under a puddle of black and burgundy fabric too shiny and sheer for daylight. He snores again. She shimmies into her dress, ponders dirty underwear for a moment and then, shrugging, tucks it into her bag. The shoes hurt her feet.
In the mirror, her face is oddly naked. Kohl smudges and the ghost of lipstick define her face, a girl he never saw. She feels both euphoric and tarnished, eager to escape.
She can't recall his name.
deborah grabien - Aug 25, 2004 3:49:47 pm PDT #6178 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Oh, Fay, *what* a vignette. So nice. But which one of mine broke you?
Anne, PC, sending as part of an email. I'm writing more as you're reading; really it's just the first three or so pages.
KRISTIN! Miss you back, my lamb.
Beverly - Aug 25, 2004 3:54:38 pm PDT #6179 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Deb, I can get back to you for sure by Friday as well, if you'd like to send. I'm missing you, too. You, and all of SF through your eyes.
deborah grabien - Aug 25, 2004 3:57:06 pm PDT #6180 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Hotay - will send. Really, this is just beginning a build; I want to set the two main characters in here through someone else's POV and fuddled memory.