Deb, I can get back to you for sure by Friday as well, if you'd like to send. I'm missing you, too. You, and all of SF through your eyes.
Saffron: You just had a better hand of cards this time. Mal: It ain't a hand of cards. It's called a life.
'Trash'
The Great Write Way
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Beverly - Aug 25, 2004 3:54:38 pm PDT #6179 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
deborah grabien - Aug 25, 2004 3:57:06 pm PDT #6180 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Hotay - will send. Really, this is just beginning a build; I want to set the two main characters in here through someone else's POV and fuddled memory.
Polter-Cow - Aug 25, 2004 4:17:32 pm PDT #6181 of 10001
What else besides ramen can you scoop? YOU CAN SCOOP THIS WORLD FROM DARKNESS!
just need to know if the style flows and the tension builds.
Backflung to basically say, "It does."
deborah grabien - Aug 25, 2004 4:21:42 pm PDT #6182 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Oh, good. Thanks, P-C; unlike human beings, these guys can't be too sympathetic (they're friggin' vampires, after all) but they're also cautious, canny, and I can't make them complete monsters, either, since eventually they're going to become potential prey for some real live human beings whose values are completely on the want-take-have level.
Beverly - Aug 25, 2004 4:36:26 pm PDT #6183 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Yes. The want-take-have conversation.
The setup is intriguing, and I definitely want to know more. Taking what I know out of the equation, I wouldn't have a clue what was coming at this point.
Anne W. - Aug 25, 2004 4:42:38 pm PDT #6184 of 10001
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.
Deb, so far it's very compelling, I like the sense of mystery that's been built up, and it leaves me wanting to know more about the strange couple at the bar (and about the bar itself).
Do you want more nitpicky comments, or is it still too early for such things?
deborah grabien - Aug 25, 2004 4:47:08 pm PDT #6185 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
AHA! I finished the prologue, I think.
Bev and Anne, toss the first bit. I'm sending the entire prologue. P-C, incoming as well. Can I get a take, please?
Beverly - Aug 25, 2004 4:49:56 pm PDT #6186 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Stoopid Yahoo mail. I'll read as soon as it arrives.
Beverly - Aug 25, 2004 5:09:25 pm PDT #6187 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
Oh my. Lovely lovely shivers of dread and anticipation. Moremoremore gimme more, please ma'am.
Deena? Your 'escape' drabble upstream just about undid me, woman, especially knowing it was based in truth.
Maria - Aug 26, 2004 12:09:45 am PDT #6188 of 10001
Not so nice is that I'm about to ruin a Friday morning for a bunch of people because of a series of unfortunate events and an upset foreign government. - shrift
Deb, if you need another beta, feel free to fling it my way.
And what are the odds we can get you back to DC for a book signing?
Edited to say profile addy is good.