Ah, you've moved the opening setting? Then I've got nothing - when it opened there, it was natural to Lucy that her thing for her cousin be present in her own head. Outside that, you've got me. No clue.
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deborah grabien - Jun 05, 2004 1:19:47 pm PDT #5091 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Susan W. - Jun 05, 2004 1:25:50 pm PDT #5092 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
Well, Sebastian himself is still there--I open when he, Lucy, and her aunt arrive at the castle where her cousin Portia will be marrying the earl. But it does change her initial focus from "here's the man I've been in love with for years" to "here's this new place unlike anywhere I've been before, and here's how the people, both familiar and new to me, are acting."
deborah grabien - Jun 05, 2004 1:36:06 pm PDT #5093 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
Stolen looks at him, perhaps? Silent admonitions to herself to not be silly about him?
Susan W. - Jun 05, 2004 1:55:20 pm PDT #5094 of 10001
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Good idea. I'll look back over the chapter and see where I can fit them in. Then maybe I can do the more detailed bit with all the background on why he matters to her at the point right after she meets James where it wouldn't interrupt the story flow.
Amy - Jun 05, 2004 2:06:11 pm PDT #5095 of 10001
Because books.
Susan, I don't know what else you've changed, but what about when she thinks about the welcome Sebastien has always shown her? Or when he defends her to Portia very early on? Seems like two natural places to say something as simple as "This is why I loved him, although I knew the sentiment was not returned" or something to that effect.
erika, got it!
Off topic, but also, erika, I friended you. Susan, would you mind if I did?
Susan W. - Jun 05, 2004 2:20:55 pm PDT #5096 of 10001
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Susan, would you mind if I did?
Please do! And those are two of the places in the chapter I'm going to look to see if I can slip something in.
Amy - Jun 05, 2004 2:29:58 pm PDT #5097 of 10001
Because books.
Cool. I'm still getting used to the LJ protocol. And, of course, feel free to friend me back.
There should be more discussion of the verbing of nouns, I think. Mischievous grin...
deborah grabien - Jun 05, 2004 2:31:52 pm PDT #5098 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
There should be more discussion of the verbing of nouns, I think
Least Favourite Ever, from a football junkie? "Audiblise."
What the hell does that mean? Audiblise? That isn't a word.
Susan W. - Jun 05, 2004 2:40:28 pm PDT #5099 of 10001
Good Trouble and Righteous Fights
I loathe "to task," but that's largely because I always picture Former Boss saying it.
Amy - Jun 05, 2004 2:43:11 pm PDT #5100 of 10001
Because books.
So incredibly not a football junkie, I have no idea what "audiblise" means. But it does sound wrong, I'll give you that.
We recently starting saying, "Can you biscuit the dog?" when she comes in from outside, which makes me giggle.