OK. Will send what I've got to both.
Katerina, flow of story, consistency, whether it grabs you right off or not, smaller things like grammar and spelling, because I haven't edited any of this yet. It's only four pages right now, but I want to make sure the reader gets hooked early. If it doesn't hook, I need to know.
Sending...
NC, your sister doesn't live in CT, does she?
Nope. Virginia, these days.
Must to intercept pestilence people (local Orkin-types), supervise and then pay them, then run to bank, stop at store to pick up new dog harness, pick up Mom's dog at groomer's, drop her off at home and make the PO by 4:45, come home and set up vcr to tape QE4tSG for Matt, and grill, cool, package and find room in the fridge for several lbs of ground steak. But I can read tonight and get back to you late, Deb. Fire away!
deb, back-sent.
And remembering the problems my e-mail did last time we tried anything like this, could you let me know if you got it?
Nilly, nothing in email. Damn it. Katerina, got your email; Bev, will send in a bit, because computer containing hard drive containing fiction is turned off, while I kill myself cleaning that #$%$## carpet.
Oof, and this time I forwarded one to my other address, and I got the mail from me jsut fine, but the person who is actually supposed to get it - well, didn't. And I don't need to get an e-mail from me, I already know what I've written!
Sigh. Insent from another address. Sorry for the bother.
Got it, Nilly. Off to read.
Dana, Bev, will send as soon as the other computer is up. My fiction is all kept on the hard drive on the dining room machine, which is off the network at the moment as Nic does downloads on the laptop.
Aaaand, you all rock. Clowns!
edit: Woot! Nilly, you caught a missing word, in the description of placement of the clowns' faces above the circus tent in the poster: it should be:
"And faces, each one somehow hovering just behind and over each tent."
I'd omitted the "each". Just a skosh difference in meaning.
Clowns! Apocalypse!
I can beta as well, Deb, if you want someone else. I like the name "Mr. CoughNSneeze."