'Shindig'
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Susan, I'm just sitting here thinking how much fun that scene would be, both to write and to read.
Oh, if I do it right, it'll be very fun indeed. And just describing it like that, I think I have a better idea of how to manage it within the style and POV the story dictates.
I hope all is well for you and yours (and I really need to get onto LJ one of these days).
Could you have her spot herself in a mirror and wonder briefly who that lovely woman is?
That's a fearsome cliché, IMHO IMHO IMHO.
Could someone else spot her in a mirror and wonder briefly who that lovely woman is?
Could someone else spot her in a mirror and wonder briefly who that lovely woman is?
Not really--I'm writing in the heroine's first-person POV.
I think I can get by with a mirror only while she's upstairs getting ready, because of course she'll be looking in one then. And I can have her note a few cogent details that seem different, but not describe herself from head-to-toe, because it's not like she's forgotten she's 5'0" with brown hair and eyes and needs to look at the mirror and remind herself.
it's not like she's forgotten she's 5'0" with brown hair and eyes and needs to look at the mirror and remind herself.
snerk! It's funny because it's true! t /Homer
I am as one with Betsy. Besides, isn't the point that she sees him really see her?
hey, now that the Phoenix is back, I'm ready to see if anyone wants to read the first part of my book in progress. It's raw and I haven't made the edits to the MS I have made to my hard copy of it (I have to edit on paper, it's a thing.)
I've gotten a few takers and they are much appreciated, but working in a vaccuum, you know -- the more feedback, the better.
Let me know! It's about 25 pages thus far.
What kind of book is it, Erin?
Erin, send it along. Happy to early-beta.