I would cut this:
Do you have any thoughts as to the timeline of an offer being formally extended?
And this:
I'm just looking ahead to the summer, and trying to work out plans for vacation, etc., and having this unknown factor makes it difficult to plan the near future.
Otherwise, it looks good. Two weeks is a long time to wait for a response.
::wonders what Cindy will name the "anonymous" hate LJ::
::wonders, why, Teppy, just, doesn't, check, her, friends-of, info::
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Nora, I think a simple question about the status is all you need.
Just wanted to check in with you, since it's been two weeks since you told me that HR is working on an offer for me. Is there anything more you need from me?
Cindy, your link is wrong. It has an extra, bufffistas in it.