We would accept, with less pleasure, a second, less en-commaed approach, deleting all commas, save the second (between products and will).
Oh, my dearest Cindy. That option doesn't make grammatical sense. Why pause there and only there? For the second comma to be left in, the first comma must also be left in.
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Heh. Totally unsurprising comma x-post.
Why pause there and only there? For the second comma to be left in, the first comma must also be left in.
I want IronFist Editing to copyedit all of my books. And posts. And other stuff.
I, LIKE, to abuse, the comma.
I'm going to go make an anonymous hate LJ, right now.
I must concur with La Tep.
Now I'm going to friend you all with my COMPLETELY ANONYMOUS LJ hate-devoted account.
I'm going to go make an anonymous hate LJ, right now.
::weeps::
::weeps for all the abused commas::
::wonders what Cindy will name the "anonymous" hate LJ::
I would cut this:
Do you have any thoughts as to the timeline of an offer being formally extended?
And this:
I'm just looking ahead to the summer, and trying to work out plans for vacation, etc., and having this unknown factor makes it difficult to plan the near future.
Otherwise, it looks good. Two weeks is a long time to wait for a response.