Wow, I totally killed it dead. Deader than a dead naked mole rat.
But that's just my point! You she obeys! She obeys you! There's obeying going on right under my nose!
Wash ,'War Stories'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.
Strix - May 25, 2006 5:20:00 pm PDT #6753 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
SailAweigh - May 25, 2006 5:28:03 pm PDT #6754 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Nah, Erin. We're all just in resting mode after the F2F. I love what you posted of your story so far. Are you going to give us more?
Strix - May 25, 2006 5:29:06 pm PDT #6755 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
I have more, yes. I just didn't want to innundate with the unwanted,
SailAweigh - May 25, 2006 5:34:09 pm PDT #6756 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Oh, hell, no! We want. Gimme.
Strix - May 25, 2006 5:44:26 pm PDT #6757 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
Strix - May 25, 2006 5:44:31 pm PDT #6758 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
Strix - May 25, 2006 5:44:36 pm PDT #6759 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
Strix - May 25, 2006 5:44:41 pm PDT #6760 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
Strix - May 25, 2006 5:44:46 pm PDT #6761 of 10001
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
SailAweigh - May 25, 2006 6:03:53 pm PDT #6762 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
I like the way you're setting up the reveal, here. A little drib here, a little drab there. Also, "Mr. Inscrutable!" Hee. Are you looking for a beta? I would be more than happy to help, vampire stories are my favorite right now.