Sail, I would have thought the last line was to stop the excuses, not the knowing-things, if not for your intro. Ouch.
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Jesse - Apr 22, 2006 6:15:14 pm PDT #6322 of 10001
Sometimes I trip on how happy we could be.
SailAweigh - Apr 22, 2006 6:33:19 pm PDT #6323 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
I challenge gender-neutral viewpoint. No human may write so, without lies.
Just so. FWIW, I've never met a man yet who apologized for knowing more than the people around him. But I've met a lot of women who do it constantly, including myself. It was one of the reasons I didn't feel I needed to state gender specifically in the drabble.
Sail, I would have thought the last line was to stop the excuses, not the knowing-things, if not for your intro. Ouch.
Well, in 100 words I try to get stuff across. I can see that this one was definitely in the "iffy" category. Still, I'm happy that a number of people got it and that it provoked some discussion. Gender roles can be tricky things and everyone has their own take on what those roles are. In all, I'm happy with the way this one turned out.
Gus - Apr 22, 2006 6:43:00 pm PDT #6324 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.
I've never met a man yet who apologized for knowing more than the people around him.
Sorry.
Phllb..bb...t.
Gawd, I can be awful.
Jesse - Apr 22, 2006 6:49:41 pm PDT #6325 of 10001
Sometimes I trip on how happy we could be.
Well, in 100 words I try to get stuff across. I can see that this one was definitely in the "iffy" category.
If anything, it makes me feel kind of naive and/or pollyanna-ish.
SailAweigh - Apr 22, 2006 6:50:38 pm PDT #6326 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Phbhtbthtbpt, right back.
Volans - Apr 22, 2006 7:25:56 pm PDT #6327 of 10001
move out and draw fire
deb, of course you may tag that, but it's as much Anne's as it is mine.
After all, she's the one with the viburnum meatball.
(Viburnum Meatball - band name)
I think my own experiences helped me to understand Sail's drabble. I've never once apologized for being smarter or knowing more than someone else, but I've been socially excluded (by both women and men) for it. The one part of the drabble's intent that didn't come across to me was the duration; it seemed like the guy's frustration occured after only about 10 minutes ever of trivia game, not repeated assaults.
SailAweigh - Apr 22, 2006 7:31:34 pm PDT #6328 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
The one part of the drabble's intent that didn't come across to me was the duration; it seemed like the guy's frustration occured after only about 10 minutes ever of trivia game, not repeated assaults.
Hee. Four days of repeated assaults. Now that I think of it, I could have worked that into the first paragraph. That would have built up the tension better. Ah, well, live and learn.
Beverly - Apr 22, 2006 7:38:49 pm PDT #6329 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
I loved Gar's. I got Sail's, and I loved ita's, too. And I enjoyed the discussion on dialog. I think it's what my first novel (the one that's in the box in the back of the closet) taught me--how to write dialog. Well, actually, how *not* to write dialog.
deborah grabien - Apr 22, 2006 7:43:45 pm PDT #6330 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I heard ita's coming out of Monica Lewinski's POV. How scary is *that*?
deborah grabien - Apr 22, 2006 7:46:31 pm PDT #6331 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
And Raq, yep - note shiny new tagline, attributed to both.