I've never met a man yet who apologized for knowing more than the people around him.
Sorry.
Phllb..bb...t.
Gawd, I can be awful.
Played with Kaylee. Sun came out, and I walked on my feet and heard with my ears. I ate the bits, the bits stayed down, and I work. I function like I'm a girl. I hate it because I know it'll go away. The sun goes dark and chaos has come again. Bits. Fluids. What am I?!
River ,'War Stories'
The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...
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Gus - Apr 22, 2006 6:43:00 pm PDT #6324 of 10001
Bag the crypto. Say what is on your mind.
Jesse - Apr 22, 2006 6:49:41 pm PDT #6325 of 10001
Sometimes I trip on how happy we could be.
Well, in 100 words I try to get stuff across. I can see that this one was definitely in the "iffy" category.
If anything, it makes me feel kind of naive and/or pollyanna-ish.
SailAweigh - Apr 22, 2006 6:50:38 pm PDT #6326 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
Phbhtbthtbpt, right back.
Volans - Apr 22, 2006 7:25:56 pm PDT #6327 of 10001
move out and draw fire
deb, of course you may tag that, but it's as much Anne's as it is mine.
After all, she's the one with the viburnum meatball.
(Viburnum Meatball - band name)
I think my own experiences helped me to understand Sail's drabble. I've never once apologized for being smarter or knowing more than someone else, but I've been socially excluded (by both women and men) for it. The one part of the drabble's intent that didn't come across to me was the duration; it seemed like the guy's frustration occured after only about 10 minutes ever of trivia game, not repeated assaults.
SailAweigh - Apr 22, 2006 7:31:34 pm PDT #6328 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb
The one part of the drabble's intent that didn't come across to me was the duration; it seemed like the guy's frustration occured after only about 10 minutes ever of trivia game, not repeated assaults.
Hee. Four days of repeated assaults. Now that I think of it, I could have worked that into the first paragraph. That would have built up the tension better. Ah, well, live and learn.
Beverly - Apr 22, 2006 7:38:49 pm PDT #6329 of 10001
Days shrink and grow cold, sunlight through leaves is my song. Winter is long.
I loved Gar's. I got Sail's, and I loved ita's, too. And I enjoyed the discussion on dialog. I think it's what my first novel (the one that's in the box in the back of the closet) taught me--how to write dialog. Well, actually, how *not* to write dialog.
deborah grabien - Apr 22, 2006 7:43:45 pm PDT #6330 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
I heard ita's coming out of Monica Lewinski's POV. How scary is *that*?
deborah grabien - Apr 22, 2006 7:46:31 pm PDT #6331 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.
And Raq, yep - note shiny new tagline, attributed to both.
Karl - Apr 22, 2006 10:57:53 pm PDT #6332 of 10001
I adore all you motherfuckers so much -- PMM.
I heard ita's coming out of Monica Lewinski's POV. How scary is *that*?
Oh, my gracious. Deb, I can always count on you for a POV I hadn't considered. Thank you for that.
dcp - Apr 22, 2006 11:36:04 pm PDT #6333 of 10001
The more I learn, the more I realize how little I know.
Interesting that you look for something to mitigate the harshness. Do you think that comes from a gender neutral viewpoint?
I don't really know. It might be just from reading it too casually the first time.
On first read, I came away thinking "Yeah, false modesty or salt in the wound, annoying either way," and puzzling over what the connection to an "in crowd" might be. Never occurred to me that someone would apologize for success and be sincere.
Your comment to Steph gave me the "in crowd" connection I had missed, and on re-read it occurred to me that if I imagined the characters as opposite sex the last line came across much more harshly than if I imagined them the same sex.
Shows my biases.