You know, my big sister could really beat the crap out of her. I mean, really really.

Dawn ,'Storyteller'


The Great Write Way, Chapter Two: Twice upon a time...  

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Connie Neil - May 30, 2005 7:43:35 pm PDT #2398 of 10001
brillig

[link] Picture One

Here's where Tommy got so drunk he threw up on my new, dyed-to-match-the-dress satin shoes.

There's the table where Mark called Daphne a whore and Daphne told him she wouldn't sleep with him even for money.

Out in the parking lot, Daphne and I cried on each other and said a convent sounded like a great idea.

Then the guys came out, I slapped Mark, Daphne slapped Tommy, and Bobby and Harry asked if we'd rather go to the Howard Johnson's for cheeseburgers and shakes.

Memo to self: remind Harry about getting gift for Daphne and Bobby's wedding next month.


deborah grabien - May 31, 2005 7:49:04 am PDT #2399 of 10001
It really doesn't matter. It's just an opinion. Don't worry about it. Not worth the hassle.

connie, that's a honey.

Huh. It may be the total immersion aspect of the current WIP, but none of those pictures are talking to me at all. Nearest thing to it is the guy in front of the ships with the swastika, but even that one is barely poking at me.

Interested to see what everyone comes up with on these.


Connie Neil - May 31, 2005 7:59:38 am PDT #2400 of 10001
brillig

[link] Picture two

It was Uncle Gregor who put the kayak on wheels. After the hay was mown, he'd push us around the shorn fields, telling us to practice our paddling and talking about cold mountain streams in Moldavia.

Tante Caterina would watch silently. That day in the summer, when the hay was blowing in the wind, Susan and I took her arms and made her join us in the kayak for the picture.

We laughed and waved, then I saw Tante's face. "It's so like waves," she said, looking at the grass billowing. "Waves mean you're leaving home."


SailAweigh - May 31, 2005 8:01:00 am PDT #2401 of 10001
Nana korobi, ya oki. (Fall down seven times, stand up eight.) ~Yuzuru Hanyu/Japanese proverb

Oh, connie, I like that one.


Steph L. - May 31, 2005 8:04:13 am PDT #2402 of 10001
the hardest to learn / was the least complicated

Deb, feedback is on its way to you.


Connie Neil - May 31, 2005 8:09:53 am PDT #2403 of 10001
brillig

[link]

Picture 8

"I bet I can make you laugh, Grossmutter."
"Photos should have dignity."
"Muti, did you hear about Onkle Fritzi and the goat and his new suit?"
"Take the picture, Hansi."
"He was wearing the suit when the goat started to eat the trousers."
...
"Oh, fine, Muti, you win." click
"Oh, thank god. And your Tante Martha beating the goat with her handbag . . ."
"Muti!"

(I seem to be in a Germanic mood today)


Allyson - May 31, 2005 9:10:38 am PDT #2404 of 10001
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica

I just got my first rejection letter.

I'm a little numb. But otherwise okay. I think.


Anne W. - May 31, 2005 9:12:55 am PDT #2405 of 10001
The lost sheep grow teeth, forsake their lambs, and lie with the lions.

Did they give you any feedback along with the rejection, or was it simply a "thanks but no thanks" deal?


Allyson - May 31, 2005 9:19:33 am PDT #2406 of 10001
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica

Thank you for submitting your query. You have a terrific idea, and clearly some great, funny stories to tell. It’s clear that you’ve had a bird’s eye view of some interesting events and experiences, which make for amusing anecdotes. However, I think the real audience for this type of book is still going to be people who are themselves involved in some type of fandom, and from that point of view I found the overall tone of these essays to be a little bit angry toward segments of that population. It also takes away from any broader social commentary you might make that would attract non-fandom readers. While these are obviously individual essays, you might consider looking at them as a cohesive whole and determine what overall theme or message you’d like to put across.

I think fandom as a cultural phenomenon is only going to continue to grow, and you could have a good sized market for a book like this. I wish you all the best finding a home for this project, and with your future writing.

It's good advice, and I think kind of her to take the time to give it.


§ ita § - May 31, 2005 9:31:47 am PDT #2407 of 10001
Well not canonically, no, but this is transformative fiction.

Given the obvious (we don't want no rejection) that's a very good letter.

Are you going to re-assess and perhaps re-plan based on that feedback?