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Buffy: You tossed that vamp like he was a... little teeny vamp. Riley: You wanna go again? C'mon. I bet this place is just teeming with aerodynamic vampires.
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Amy - Nov 14, 2011 7:48:40 am PST #4872 of 6690
Because books.
Allyson - Nov 14, 2011 7:50:09 am PST #4873 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
I'm trying to plow through the proposal and clean up essays for my December 1 deadline. I need to add to/polish the essay on the sleezy motivational speaker and the rock bonding, as it's a good complement to first/introductory essay. But I keep falling back on Me and Chuck D, a piece on how Public Enemy got me through a science conference when i felt very small and stupid.
I think it's because I feel very small and stupid right now, instead of the usual righteous indignation. I don't have a lot of time. I need to focus.
Tom Scola - Nov 14, 2011 7:51:31 am PST #4874 of 6690
Remember that the frontier of the Rebellion is everywhere. And even the smallest act of insurrection pushes our lines forward.
Maybe #2 would be more interesting from the POV of the selkie?
Amy - Nov 14, 2011 8:00:29 am PST #4875 of 6690
Because books.
Tom, I hadn't thought of that. I'm not sure it would work, but it's worth thinking about it.
Allyson, do you want some feedback on the motivational speaker/rock essay? I'm happy to help.
Allyson - Nov 14, 2011 8:17:28 am PST #4876 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
It's really a wreck of random tangents. Overwrought. I need to dial it back. I can't get over the whole, "DO YOU KNOW WHERE YOU ARE RIGHT NOW?" aspect of it. I found his whole schtick to be so disrespectful of my workplace, and I spend far too much time in the piece raking him over the coals in such a blunt force way when what I really need is a scalpel and a steady hand.
I sound more like a cult member defending Dear Leader than I really want or mean. It's sloppy. And it's because I'm losing the humor/irony of having this Tony Robbins-like The Secret hawking snake oil salesman being paid to inspire people working at a science institution. Instead I'm just disturbed.
Amy - Nov 14, 2011 8:21:56 am PST #4877 of 6690
Because books.
If you want suggestions about what's worth keeping -- or just fresh eyes -- you know where I am.
Allyson - Nov 14, 2011 8:31:34 am PST #4878 of 6690
Wait, is this real-world child support, where the money goes to buy food for the kids, or MRA fantasyland child support where the women just buy Ferraris and cocaine? -Jessica
Thanks!
Strix - Nov 14, 2011 10:18:16 am PST #4879 of 6690
A dress should be tight enough to show you're a woman but loose enough to flee from zombies. — Ginger
Yeah, Allyson, I'll beta. Not for science (dur) but clarity. How long is the piece?
Ginger - Nov 14, 2011 10:38:39 am PST #4880 of 6690
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda
I don't think I make a very good beta reader, because I have to fight back my need to change things. I am, however, a good proofreader, fact checker and sentence fixer, and good at shortening other people's copy. My own, not so much. I'd be glad to look at essay(s) at the point they need that, Allyson.
Speaking of my own writing, I use "wide variety" way too often. I've written a wide variety of articles on a wide variety of subjects for a wide variety of readers. Any suggestions?
-t - Nov 14, 2011 10:47:52 am PST #4881 of 6690
I am a woman of various inclinations and only some of the time are they to burn everything down in frustration
Diverse, eclectic, broad spectrum of, heterogeneous