Cordelia: You're him. You're Angel's son. Connor: It's not like I got to choose.

'Hell Bound'


The Great Write Way, Act Three: Where's the gun?

A place for Buffistas to discuss, beta and otherwise deal and dish on their non-fan fiction projects.


Barb - Sep 14, 2011 2:38:28 pm PDT #4654 of 6690
“Not dead yet!”

They do... sort of. The baby boy Matthew's soul winds up in meets Emily at the end and there's a sort of instant recognition thing. Or something to that effect.


Amy - Sep 14, 2011 2:39:12 pm PDT #4655 of 6690
Because books.

But then aren't they seventeen years apart? Or am I confused?


Liese S. - Sep 14, 2011 2:41:23 pm PDT #4656 of 6690
"Faded like the lilac, he thought."

No, that was the rewind bit, right?


Amy - Sep 14, 2011 2:50:43 pm PDT #4657 of 6690
Because books.

I would try something along the lines of:

She gives him a second chance, and he gives her the love she's always dreamed of. But life -- and death -- are more complicated than either of them expects ...

Then fill in with comparisons, etc., a la In the tradition of The Sixth Sense and [more teen oriented movie than Time Traveler's Wide], this is the story of two kids who have to make the hardest choice you can face.


Barb - Sep 14, 2011 2:58:01 pm PDT #4658 of 6690
“Not dead yet!”

Liese is right, Amy-- that's the rewind bit. We rewind back to the night Matthew originally dies and Emily is born-- his soul continues on into a baby also being born at the same time, so that seventeen years later, when they finally meet, they're both seventeen years old.

There's a spark of instant recognition in that "I feel as if I've known you forever," sense, nothing more than that.


Ginger - Sep 14, 2011 3:38:10 pm PDT #4659 of 6690
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda

Here's a shot at it:

When two souls touch, can death keep them apart? Emily is haunted by the face of boy she's never met. When she meets Matthew, the boy she's drawn since childhood seems to have come to life. But has it? Emily and Matthew must make hard decisions about love and revenge before they answer the eternal question: Does love ever die?


hippocampus - Sep 14, 2011 3:52:51 pm PDT #4660 of 6690
not your mom's socks.

Nice, Ginger.


Barb - Sep 14, 2011 3:58:45 pm PDT #4661 of 6690
“Not dead yet!”

Ginger, I like a lot of the elements of that pitch. My critique partner came up with a nice one, too:

Emily has loved Matthew all her life -- despite the fact that he died the night she was born. Is she crazy, or is their bond stronger than the boundaries between time and space...life and death?

I'm wondering, since this is for a producer, if I don't need to include the BLANK meets BLANK comparison and *gulp* invoke the T-word?*

  • Twilight

::spits three times and throws holy water::


Ginger - Sep 14, 2011 4:04:48 pm PDT #4662 of 6690
"It didn't taste good. It tasted soooo horrible. It tasted like....a vodka martini." - Matilda

I thought about the T-word. There's always "A supernatural romance in the tradition of Twilight...."

shudder


hippocampus - Sep 14, 2011 4:07:30 pm PDT #4663 of 6690
not your mom's socks.

Well, you are subverting Twighlight to suit your own purposes. Still. ptui.